Undergraduate / "Speak Up" - college essay. NEEDS REVISIONS [6]

hey! I enjoyed ur essay cuz i had similar experiences and standing up for ur own cause is really great and rewarding.
but i think u might want to tell us why christianity is so impt to u cuz it seems that u keep saying that ur religion is of utter importance to u but u rarely show it thru events or else.

Good Luck tho!