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aGar03   
Oct 22, 2009
Undergraduate / UC- Important Personal Experience- Missing A Flight [4]

It's alright but doesn't stick to the prompt enough. Needs to show more about who you are as a person. Say something like you were able to perform under pressure and talk more about the whole "I can adapt to the circumstances" idea- I liked that part. Also, I don't see how the contrast of your frantic reaction with your parent's calmness helped your essay.

Good comments: i think it is a very original topic- you shouldn't go write a whole new essay. I like the tone also- makes you seem like a real person
aGar03   
Oct 22, 2009
Undergraduate / A Conversation with Myself: Our Life. Common Application Main Essay. [18]

Thought it was a very powerful essay in that you got the point across- you had a challenging life as a child. However, it seemed too scattered for me. Don't think it would fit the "person you admire" prompt. Also, I was a bit confused of where you lived exactly- maybe you should adress the location of your residence earlier. And fix all the grammatical mistakes.

Very good though, I would admit you to my college
aGar03   
Oct 22, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Dream is short - waking is long' - Stanford intellectual vitality- dreaming [2]

Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

PLEASE comment and edit. Don't be nice!

Some take a religious approach on them, others attempt to extract the deeper spiritual meaning from them, and most simply ignore these natural phenomena. To me however, dreams represent a frontier- a mystery that science has just begun to unveil.

Sri Ramana once said, "There is no difference between the dream and the waking state except that the dream is short and the waking long." I have found this statement to be immensely true through personal experience with lucid dreaming. Approximately half of the population has at one time dreamt lucidly, or has been aware that they were dreaming. Perhaps some feel that this happening is too fleeting to be worth while; however, my familiarity along with my overbearing trust in science has led me towards the contrary. I side with the results of extensive research which has proven that the subconscious can indeed be controlled during sleep.

On January 10, 2007 I took the first step towards lucid dreaming by starting a dream journal. For thirty nights in a row I recorded my nocturnal occurrences, much to the peril of a peaceful rest. Through studying many strategies and experimenting nightly I eventually achieved consciousness during sleep. Intense dedication allowed me to master the lucid state, and thus I was essentially able to live two lives.

Longing to experience more, I turned towards science and began my investigation. REM (rapid eye movement) corresponds with a person's dream state and has enabled scientists to communicate with a dreamer via eye movement signals. Recent technology has even transferred dreamers into a state of awareness by applying special goggles. If this progress has been a result of only a few decades, there is no telling where it will go from here. At this rate, science will surely formulate a universal, flawless method for achieving dream awareness. To most, this idea has either not been emphasized enough or has merely not been introduced to them. Studies on the subject suggest that dreams may promote creativity, induce positive habits, and provide for a healthier lifestyle. I believe that dream control could revolutionize the way our culture views sleeping. Instead of dreading the approaching night, people would eagerly await and prepare for their next journey. Not to mention the economical benefits for mattress companies!

However, until this day arrives I will have to wait. But by waiting I don't mean to be inactive: my practice of lucid dreaming will never cease and my knowledge on the subject will continue to spread awareness and promote this unique and engaging mind activity.

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