theunknownalex
Aug 24, 2021
Writing Feedback / [ Writing task 1 ] The number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city by gender [4]
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The line graph provides information about how many men and women in Marysville paid for mobile phone services over a period of 20 years.
It is noticeable that there were considerable increases in the figures for subscribers of mobile phones during the 20-year period. In 2015, the number of men spending on mobile services outweighed the number of women who did the same thing.
In the year 1995, 500 men expended on mobile phones while the figure for women was around 510 people. Over the following 10 years, the numbers of subscribers for both genders saw significant rises. By 2005, the proportions for both male and female subscribers had reached to 2500 people.
From 2005 to 2015, there was a steady increase in the number of men subscribing to mobiles, while the figure for women fell and subsequently remained stable. Finally, in 2015, approximately 2600 females paid for mobile phones, and around 2200 females spent on those gadgets.
I'm currently self-studying because I don't have much budget in the Covid-19 situation. Could you guys fix my essay and estimate my band score, please? Thank you very much!
summarize the information from the graph
The line graph provides information about how many men and women in Marysville paid for mobile phone services over a period of 20 years.
It is noticeable that there were considerable increases in the figures for subscribers of mobile phones during the 20-year period. In 2015, the number of men spending on mobile services outweighed the number of women who did the same thing.
In the year 1995, 500 men expended on mobile phones while the figure for women was around 510 people. Over the following 10 years, the numbers of subscribers for both genders saw significant rises. By 2005, the proportions for both male and female subscribers had reached to 2500 people.
From 2005 to 2015, there was a steady increase in the number of men subscribing to mobiles, while the figure for women fell and subsequently remained stable. Finally, in 2015, approximately 2600 females paid for mobile phones, and around 2200 females spent on those gadgets.
