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Oct 2, 2022
Writing Feedback / IElTS WRITTING TASK 2 - SUCCESS TOPIC. Do you think wealth the best measure of success? [3]
Question:
Do you think wealth the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?
Essay:
It is widely believe that the key criteria of success is money and property. Personally, I completely disagree with this statement since wealth is just a minor/ small part of the overall picture of success, and it should be measured by one's achievements and happiness.
To begin with, there are considerable number of upper-class people gradually losing their inherent happiness. In other words, despite
possessing materialistic things and huge wealth, those who take responsibility for dealing with a number of problem in their entrepreneurs could not spend time on taking care of their family. Recent marriage survey conducted in America has shown that over 40% of wealthy couples do not have a sense of happiness since the breadwinners rarely have dinner in their family, instead, they would have ones with their colleagues and partners due to the busy nature of work. In the long run, this would pose an invisible distance between family members, which is the main cause behind the blurs and rift of family relationship or even divorces
Besides, there are several objective aspects for the consideration of one's success.First and foremost, success should be gauged through one's accomplishments and performance. For example, Bill Gates who is a worldwide well-known businessman, investor and philanthropist shared one of the biggest secrets for his success is his passion, diligence and inquisitiveness in work. This extraordinary person, as a result, has achieve the goal of high sales that he set out for his corporation.Secondly,happiness are crucial factor for a person seeking success since this reflect people's mental life. Granted, a businessman who always live in a state of unhappiness, depression, self-deception abd guiltiness could not enjoy the fruit of their labor and a comfortable life, and thus all of their efforts and success so far have been in vain. Therefore,in order to become successful, people first should look for their own happiness.
In summary, while some maintain that the best measure of success is material wealth and belongings, however, I believe that achievements and happiness is by far the key criteria of success. From my perspective, upper-class people should make a contribution to the development of their nation instead of solely making profit for their company and themselves.
Question:
Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings.
Do you think wealth the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?
Essay:
It is widely believe that the key criteria of success is money and property. Personally, I completely disagree with this statement since wealth is just a minor/ small part of the overall picture of success, and it should be measured by one's achievements and happiness.
To begin with, there are considerable number of upper-class people gradually losing their inherent happiness. In other words, despite
possessing materialistic things and huge wealth, those who take responsibility for dealing with a number of problem in their entrepreneurs could not spend time on taking care of their family. Recent marriage survey conducted in America has shown that over 40% of wealthy couples do not have a sense of happiness since the breadwinners rarely have dinner in their family, instead, they would have ones with their colleagues and partners due to the busy nature of work. In the long run, this would pose an invisible distance between family members, which is the main cause behind the blurs and rift of family relationship or even divorces
Besides, there are several objective aspects for the consideration of one's success.First and foremost, success should be gauged through one's accomplishments and performance. For example, Bill Gates who is a worldwide well-known businessman, investor and philanthropist shared one of the biggest secrets for his success is his passion, diligence and inquisitiveness in work. This extraordinary person, as a result, has achieve the goal of high sales that he set out for his corporation.Secondly,happiness are crucial factor for a person seeking success since this reflect people's mental life. Granted, a businessman who always live in a state of unhappiness, depression, self-deception abd guiltiness could not enjoy the fruit of their labor and a comfortable life, and thus all of their efforts and success so far have been in vain. Therefore,in order to become successful, people first should look for their own happiness.
In summary, while some maintain that the best measure of success is material wealth and belongings, however, I believe that achievements and happiness is by far the key criteria of success. From my perspective, upper-class people should make a contribution to the development of their nation instead of solely making profit for their company and themselves.