Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

thanks again ,I am trying to improve.(cümle kurdukça hata yapmaktan korkuyorum:/ :)

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

malesef:/
It is a part of exam :(

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

teşekkür ederim =)

I try to chance the content of the essay but I Don t hope I have enough time :/

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

thanks for your comments=)
I will change some sentences with your suggestion but I think some sentences are false ?

please help,I have an exam tomorrow:(

Undergraduate / Essay about my superhero in my childhood, which was my mother [13]

how to make this essay better?