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Name: Nguyễn Ngọc Quyên
Joined: Jun 29, 2024
Last Post: Jul 3, 2024
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School: Tran Dai Nghia

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ngocquyen   
Jul 3, 2024
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - MAP OF CENTRAL LIBRARY 20 YEARS AGO AND TODAY [2]

The map illustrates how the arrangement of Central Library changed after 2 decades.

Overall, most of the library have been repurposed to provide more services, including modern technology, refreshments and events.

On the left-hand side, the room in the top corner consisting of CDs, videos and computer games was converted to hold storytelling events. This room was expanded to put two sofas and there are also children's fiction books. The middle area once was adult fiction books has been changed to all reference books. A computer room is located at the bottom corner, replacing the old reading room.

The top corner room on the right side was converted from children's books to lecture room. The enquiry desk including tickets or book returns was demolished and a café is built on this right bottom area. The middle space only had adult non-fiction books but now having fiction books, adding an information desk and three self-serviec machines. Tables and chairs in the centre right in front of the entrance were all removed.



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ngocquyen   
Jul 3, 2024
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (PIE CHART) - TRANSPORTATION [3]

The lengths of your 2 paragraphs are not balanced, probably because of your approach to divide the information. I suggest that you describe each pie chart in a paragraph, so you can balance the length of your essay!
ngocquyen   
Jun 30, 2024
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - GLOBAL MOBILE PHONE SALES BY BRAND [3]

The bar chart compares five brands' worldwide sales of mobile phone in three years 2009, 2011 and 2013.

Overall, Samsung, Appe and ZTE experienced upward trend while Nokia and LG figures indicated the opposite. Samsung phones became the most popular by the end of the period, and ZTE had the least devices sold.

Although having similar pattern, three brands Samsung, Apple and ZTE showed varying figures. Samsung sold over 250 million phones in 2009, increasing considerably to around 325 million in 2011 and surging to 450 million in 2013. Apple only had 25 million products sold in 2011, but their number inclined significantly that they finally ranked third in 2013, with 150 million. Despite having a better sale than Apple in 2009 with 50 million mobile phones, ZTE number only increased slightly to reach their peak of approximately 60 million, becoming the least popular brand in 2013.

Nokia and LG both adopted downward trend in the mobile phone market. Beginning with the highest number in 2009, at nearly 450 illion, Nokia phone sales decreased 2 years later and dropped drastically to 250 million, but still remaining the second leading brand. 125 million LG mobile phones were purchased in 2009, gradually declining to around 90 million and ending with 75 million, ranked fourth among the top 5 brands.
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