Essays / Looking for Suggestions on My College Admission Essay [2]

Hello everyone,

I've written my college admission essay and I'm hoping for some insights. The prompt asked me to describe a personal challenge and how I dealt with it. I'm unsure if my story flows well and if the conclusion ties it all together effectively.

I'd appreciate any thoughts or advice on the structure and overall presentation. Thanks in advance for your time!

Abel Nicholas You must post the essay here.