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Jun 12, 2025
Writing Feedback / Adult education centre attendance - IELTS CHART [2]
[[b]R][The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
The first bar chart shows the preferred courses of men and women who participated in different evening classes at an education for grown-up people, and the second chart illustrates the percentage of type of participants' ages from under 20 to over 50.
In general, it is apparent that the ages had most people registered evening courses in the pie chart was aged 50 or over. On the other hand, in the bar chart, women shown their preference with four kinds of classes more than men.
According to the pie chart, people under 20 shown the least concern about evening courses, with onlt 5%. By contrast, the porportion of people aged 50 or over who took part in these classes were up to 42%, standing at the first position. The second position belonged to figure for attending evening classes of people from age 40 to 49 with 26% participants. Ages 30 to 39 and 20 to 29 witnessed 16% and 11%, respectively.
From the figure of the bar chart, languages, had 40 female attended, was the most ideal course for women. Otherwise, sculpture witnessed only 5 women participants. Men prefer painting, the number of men attending painting course were 30 people. However, men also shared the least preference for sculpture. The number of men participants in this class were only 10 people.
P/s:
P/s: Could you mark my essay based on the IELTS band from 1.0 to 9.0 and give me some instructions on how to improve it? Thanks a lot.
[[b]R][The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
The first bar chart shows the preferred courses of men and women who participated in different evening classes at an education for grown-up people, and the second chart illustrates the percentage of type of participants' ages from under 20 to over 50.
In general, it is apparent that the ages had most people registered evening courses in the pie chart was aged 50 or over. On the other hand, in the bar chart, women shown their preference with four kinds of classes more than men.
According to the pie chart, people under 20 shown the least concern about evening courses, with onlt 5%. By contrast, the porportion of people aged 50 or over who took part in these classes were up to 42%, standing at the first position. The second position belonged to figure for attending evening classes of people from age 40 to 49 with 26% participants. Ages 30 to 39 and 20 to 29 witnessed 16% and 11%, respectively.
From the figure of the bar chart, languages, had 40 female attended, was the most ideal course for women. Otherwise, sculpture witnessed only 5 women participants. Men prefer painting, the number of men attending painting course were 30 people. However, men also shared the least preference for sculpture. The number of men participants in this class were only 10 people.
P/s:
P/s: Could you mark my essay based on the IELTS band from 1.0 to 9.0 and give me some instructions on how to improve it? Thanks a lot.
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