Letters / (Event Coordinator position) letter for a job application-help me [2]

I was encountered some grammar problem in writing a letter for job application. wish you could give me some suggestion on the grammar mistake that i made in order to impress them. i was ashamed that i couldn't write an impressive letter with my qualification of Bachelor Degree. yours suggestion on how to improving it would be highly appreciated.

Dear Sir/Madam,

Application for the Post of Event Coordinator

I wish to apply for the post of Event Coordinator that was advertised in the Malaysian Daily News dated 4th Feb.

2. I am fresh graduate of Bachelor Degree in mass communication. I am very interested in how to managing the public's perception of and attitude toward clients as peoples always having diversification opinions towards different things. It is this curiosity that triggered my ambition to take this course.

2. I took part in several events when I was in college in order to challenge myself for pursuing of experiences and know ledges for future workforce. Most important of all is to accustom myself into social life and familiar myself towards market brands to polish my communication skill.

3. I willing to take the initiative in making improvements of work. I do not afraid to make mistake as I believe I could realize my strengths and weaknesses from the mistake.

I have enclosed my CV and I am available for an interview at any time convenient to you. I hope to get a favorable response from you.

Thank you.

Yours faithfully,

(Lim Yee Yee)

hope can get your reply as soon as possible.thanks.