Undergraduate / Opinion to defend, in conflict with the majority - admission essay [4]

Hey, there! Could you tell me your email address? I'm from HK... Junior year in high school and i know Tsinghua University... a nice place :p

And something about your essay... There's no doubt that you did a good job! No grammatical mistakes and your vocabulary is just fine >.< but what i wanna talk about is i personally think you should focus on more on your personal thinking and how you felt when you finally make the decision... Eeee, the materials you use in the essay seems to be kinda clichez ( or platitude )... just from my point of view. Since my brother was admitted into Harvard 3 years ago, i've read many essays and right now i'm also doing the apply work myself...

Best of luck >.<