Danni Nicole
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Inspiration Essay about a Broadway star [2]
I would love help on editing my essay. I'm really not great at grammar and usually miss mistakes.
here it is:
When I was 12 years old, most my friends we're interested in artists such as Britney Spears, and Christina Aguilera. I, on the other hand, was a little bit different. Not many girls get the opportunity to meet the one person who they idolize, and the one person who inspires them to do everything their heart dreams of doing. What I thought of as an artist, was not a pop-singing-sensation or the latest hot boy band. My biggest inspiration in life, my personal hero, and idol, was Broadway star Shoshana Bean. I was always interested in Broadway and theater; Maybe not as a career, but as a hobby that I was seriously passionate about. I loved the idea of expressing yourself through music and lyrics. There are so many talented people out there on the Great White Way, but Shoshana Bean had a different appeal to me than any other artist I've ever listened to, or seen perform. Her high belting, riffs, runs, and incredible lyrics are what initially drew me into her. It was after the day we finally met, that I realized she was much more than just the green-skinned girl she played onstage in Wicked The Musical, and she was more than just astonishing vocal talent. She was a real and genuine person with real ideas, and real emotions. She cared about fans, and treated them as though they were her friends. Not many people get to say they met their hero, but I do. I had to opportunity to meet the one person in my life that inspired me the most. She was one of those people that I thought I wanted to grow up to be just like. I remember the day we met, my stomach felt like it was tied into a million knots. If I was any more nervous, I may have just died right then and there. My idol was looking at me, talking to me, and asking for my name. It was the most unreal and unbelievable experience I could ever imagine happening to me. I was completely and utterly star struck. After talking to her for quite a while, she gave me the greatest piece of advice that I have ever received to this day. "Whatever you plan or dream to do, do it now and don't wait. Whatever is holding you back or standing in your way, learn from it, heal it, forgive it, and press on." Every single day I think about those words she has said and the impact they have had on my life. Any time I'm feeling like I can't accomplish something, or that I'm not good enough, I think about her advice and where it has gotten her. I know that will face various things in my life that may throw me off track or block my way, but these are merely hurdles that are meant to be jumped over. Because of Shoshana Bean, I truly believe I can overcome any obstacles that my future has in store for me. I learn from my mistakes, and I move on, and most of all, I believe in myself.
I would love help on editing my essay. I'm really not great at grammar and usually miss mistakes.
here it is:
When I was 12 years old, most my friends we're interested in artists such as Britney Spears, and Christina Aguilera. I, on the other hand, was a little bit different. Not many girls get the opportunity to meet the one person who they idolize, and the one person who inspires them to do everything their heart dreams of doing. What I thought of as an artist, was not a pop-singing-sensation or the latest hot boy band. My biggest inspiration in life, my personal hero, and idol, was Broadway star Shoshana Bean. I was always interested in Broadway and theater; Maybe not as a career, but as a hobby that I was seriously passionate about. I loved the idea of expressing yourself through music and lyrics. There are so many talented people out there on the Great White Way, but Shoshana Bean had a different appeal to me than any other artist I've ever listened to, or seen perform. Her high belting, riffs, runs, and incredible lyrics are what initially drew me into her. It was after the day we finally met, that I realized she was much more than just the green-skinned girl she played onstage in Wicked The Musical, and she was more than just astonishing vocal talent. She was a real and genuine person with real ideas, and real emotions. She cared about fans, and treated them as though they were her friends. Not many people get to say they met their hero, but I do. I had to opportunity to meet the one person in my life that inspired me the most. She was one of those people that I thought I wanted to grow up to be just like. I remember the day we met, my stomach felt like it was tied into a million knots. If I was any more nervous, I may have just died right then and there. My idol was looking at me, talking to me, and asking for my name. It was the most unreal and unbelievable experience I could ever imagine happening to me. I was completely and utterly star struck. After talking to her for quite a while, she gave me the greatest piece of advice that I have ever received to this day. "Whatever you plan or dream to do, do it now and don't wait. Whatever is holding you back or standing in your way, learn from it, heal it, forgive it, and press on." Every single day I think about those words she has said and the impact they have had on my life. Any time I'm feeling like I can't accomplish something, or that I'm not good enough, I think about her advice and where it has gotten her. I know that will face various things in my life that may throw me off track or block my way, but these are merely hurdles that are meant to be jumped over. Because of Shoshana Bean, I truly believe I can overcome any obstacles that my future has in store for me. I learn from my mistakes, and I move on, and most of all, I believe in myself.