Essays / Marketing Essays - Marketing Strategies Thesis Statement; dissertations and research papers [21]

Can someone please tell me if my thesis statement below is strong enough?

Thanks,

Barbi

THESIS STATEMENT

"While researching the field of Marketing Strategies I found that a Marketing Analyst comes up with a plan of action to make a retail store successful in a particular community and the job pays very well when you get the proper degree providing you with the tools you need to be successful in this competitive field."