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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused the crime.

Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case.

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Please, I'd like to know your opinions in my following essay and correct it for me especially the grammer and word order:

Most of societies evaluate the offenders depending on their past. So, they always are not given a chance to be repentants, but to what extent has that affect on them if they were defendants in front the jury in the court?

Some people argue that, the jury should be given all the criminal history about the defendants to be aware what kind of people they are. Further more, is that people ,who commit crimes, usually have had strong cause to repeate that again.

For example, if the jury was knowing the criminal past of the defendants, they might be helped to decide, especially if their current crimes were of the same kind. Besides, usually they are being accused of the crime.

On the other hand, appearance the defendants's past criminal record to the jury could be routing their thought only to the negative facts about them. In addition, that will disturb them to concentrating on the real facts in the current litigation.

One interesting point, this practice could be used badly by lawyers who plead for defendants who commit their first crimes especially if there are defendants with a criminal history in the same doubt circle in the litigation, as well as it will become easily making wrong decision.

I personally, believe that British and Australian judicature should not change this practice because it will lead to disappearing defendants's innocence if they were repentants indeed. From my view, the jury all they need to know are current criminal case aspects about the defendants to make the right decision regardless of their criminal record.

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