Falcon13
Jul 27, 2010
Undergraduate / Marching band section leader: a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment [6]
A little better??? I'm still brainstorming :)
A little better??? I'm still brainstorming :)
Falcon13
Jul 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / Essay about 2 kinds of friendship - Judith Viorst [7]
Very good essay! I like how you broke it down. For a non-english speaker you write well
Very good essay! I like how you broke it down. For a non-english speaker you write well
Falcon13
Jul 23, 2010
Undergraduate / Marching band section leader: a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment [6]
I feel i need to add more but i don't want to ramble.
In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.
I will always remember the day that I was chosen to become a section leader in my high school's marching band. I was driving down the road with my mom and my phone began to ring. Since I had been waiting weeks for this one call, I whipped out my cell phone and answered it. When I recognized the voice on the other end as my band director, my heart soared with excitement. While I was as happy as can be, my mom was giving me a glare that could kill. I hung up the phone, with a huge smile on my face, and glanced over at her to tell her the good news. "What did I say about answering the phone while driving?" she growled. But after I told her the news she was so proud of me it almost seemed like she forgot about the whole talking-on-the-phone-while-driving thing.
While I was totally excited about this opportunity, I was equally on edge. What if I couldn't be a good leader? What if I failed? Well, failure just isn't an option for me. During my term as section leader, I blossomed out of my shell as an individual. I worked hard to learn how to gain respect from my peers and to get everyone to work together as a team. Being a leader isn't all about the glory of a title. It is about bringing people together to overcome an obstacle in life. Whether that obstacle is teaching your peers a marching routine or leading a lab group in a classroom, both situations need a leader to guide them. As I enter adulthood, I more and more see myself as the person to take charge. When I get in to college, I will no longer be a child. I will be a young adult who is in control of my own future. I fully plan to push myself to do my best to get the most out of my education.
I feel i need to add more but i don't want to ramble.
In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.
I will always remember the day that I was chosen to become a section leader in my high school's marching band. I was driving down the road with my mom and my phone began to ring. Since I had been waiting weeks for this one call, I whipped out my cell phone and answered it. When I recognized the voice on the other end as my band director, my heart soared with excitement. While I was as happy as can be, my mom was giving me a glare that could kill. I hung up the phone, with a huge smile on my face, and glanced over at her to tell her the good news. "What did I say about answering the phone while driving?" she growled. But after I told her the news she was so proud of me it almost seemed like she forgot about the whole talking-on-the-phone-while-driving thing.
While I was totally excited about this opportunity, I was equally on edge. What if I couldn't be a good leader? What if I failed? Well, failure just isn't an option for me. During my term as section leader, I blossomed out of my shell as an individual. I worked hard to learn how to gain respect from my peers and to get everyone to work together as a team. Being a leader isn't all about the glory of a title. It is about bringing people together to overcome an obstacle in life. Whether that obstacle is teaching your peers a marching routine or leading a lab group in a classroom, both situations need a leader to guide them. As I enter adulthood, I more and more see myself as the person to take charge. When I get in to college, I will no longer be a child. I will be a young adult who is in control of my own future. I fully plan to push myself to do my best to get the most out of my education.
