Undergraduate / "fascinated with building things- Vires, Artes, Mores are reflected in your life how? [5]

For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

That is my essay question. I had an essay for UF and their question was describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

This is what I wrote:

Ever since I was little, I have always been fascinated with building things. My imagination constructed huge skyscrapers, mansions and vehicles I plan, one day, to make it a reality. This love of tinker toys I've decided to become a mechanical engineer. To help me prepare I participated in my school's robotic and engineering club where we redesigned a golf cart. The robotics and engineering club gave me new insight, experience and knowledge in the engineering field. While working on projects, I realized that becoming an engineer requires dedication, patience and insight I've yet to discover, whether its something like designing an engine that gets 70 miles to the gallon or a vehicle that increases a soldiers chance of survival.

I learned new tools and how to properly use them; how an engine operates and what each part does. I learned that an engineer must know how every little detail works, because a small tweak can increase fuel efficiency or strengthen the tension of armor plating. We also participated in the meetings to discuss future projects or what we needed to work on for the current one.

Of all that experience, the most important result was the development of my passion for designing vehicles. I have spent over 2 hours a week working on a golf cart transforming the humdrum into a work of pure beauty. From stripping it down to nothing but its axels and wheels to buffing off the rust, a painstaking task but one which was necessary. I was mentored on how an engine operated, took apart the engine block, learned what part each piece played and rebuilt a more efficient one. There were times when some of my ideas didn't work so I went back to square one and back again. When that moment comes your idea finally comes together and starts working, the feeling inside you can't be described.

I never dreamt that joining robotics and engineering class would lead uncovering a love, not just a time filler. The thought of the endless possibilities that can come with a little time and hard work, to be able to create something new makes me want to grasp the brass rim and change the world. I am a dedicated, indomitable student who seeks to broaden my knowledge and achieve my goals. The University of Florida is where I want to do that for there is no place better suited to make dreams come true.

So my real question is can i take that essay and just tweak the last sentence and call that my essay for FSU? Please add any changes to tweak it to make it answer FSU's question.