quakergirl93
Sep 18, 2010
Undergraduate / Common App Short Essay: Center Stage [4]
SHORT ANSWER: Please elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150 words or less)
CENTER STAGE
A single spotlight shines on my face. All around me is darkness and silence. It is as though the world as I know it ceases to exist and I am a different person, one with a new perspective and a new life. On that dark stage, I am anyone but me--an innocent little child, a perky blonde, a strong-willed rebellious fugitive, or a serious yet wise teacher. It is like I have disappeared and a new character comes to life: the one person the world is waiting for, the one on whom all the attention is on. Being the focus of hundreds of eyes brings out a gnawing, churning sensation in my stomach and a feeling of being invincible and powerful. There is nothing like the feeling of being on stage. Most people are scared of this brand of attention paid to them. However, I am most alive in these moments. Each time I am on stage is the culmination of weeks, of years or even of a lifetime of learned hard work, patience, dedication, and discipline. In essence, it is a reward for giving my best and pushing myself beyond my limits. Then, all of a sudden, the lights fade and the curtain goes down. It's all over.
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Hi! Do you think this is a suitable answer to the prompt? I also need help shortening this. So far. It is 210 words. Do you have any suggestions how I can shorten this? Thanks! Any other commentary or critiquing is greatly appreciated too! :)
SHORT ANSWER: Please elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150 words or less)
CENTER STAGE
A single spotlight shines on my face. All around me is darkness and silence. It is as though the world as I know it ceases to exist and I am a different person, one with a new perspective and a new life. On that dark stage, I am anyone but me--an innocent little child, a perky blonde, a strong-willed rebellious fugitive, or a serious yet wise teacher. It is like I have disappeared and a new character comes to life: the one person the world is waiting for, the one on whom all the attention is on. Being the focus of hundreds of eyes brings out a gnawing, churning sensation in my stomach and a feeling of being invincible and powerful. There is nothing like the feeling of being on stage. Most people are scared of this brand of attention paid to them. However, I am most alive in these moments. Each time I am on stage is the culmination of weeks, of years or even of a lifetime of learned hard work, patience, dedication, and discipline. In essence, it is a reward for giving my best and pushing myself beyond my limits. Then, all of a sudden, the lights fade and the curtain goes down. It's all over.
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Hi! Do you think this is a suitable answer to the prompt? I also need help shortening this. So far. It is 210 words. Do you have any suggestions how I can shorten this? Thanks! Any other commentary or critiquing is greatly appreciated too! :)