Lala0131
Oct 21, 2010
Undergraduate / The mysteries of human memory: My Common App essay [6]
OK, I just got rid of the toy stamp - that was just meant to be random like remembering the green carpet and stuff (I like random stuff). And I meant "I treasure this memory, not only because it is one of my earliest, but also because it tells me how my younger self had to learn what seems so simple but so human - a type of knowledge we take for granted" as...like...I had to LEARN how emotions are sometimes shown - almost as in, if I had never learned that people smile when they're happy and frown when they're sad, I wouldn't know the difference? Oh I don't know...I don't quite know how to fix it although I know what you mean linmark.
And I should deal with the comma-craze, especially for the last sentence yes...
Also, at the very end I was going to add some version of : "Because in all honesty, all I want from my future to be is happy - hopefully happy enough to cry" and add something about...how I the only way I know to be happy is by studying and achieving my dream. Does that make the whole essay a bit corny? Is it better with or without it?
And thank to all of you very much!!!
OK, I just got rid of the toy stamp - that was just meant to be random like remembering the green carpet and stuff (I like random stuff). And I meant "I treasure this memory, not only because it is one of my earliest, but also because it tells me how my younger self had to learn what seems so simple but so human - a type of knowledge we take for granted" as...like...I had to LEARN how emotions are sometimes shown - almost as in, if I had never learned that people smile when they're happy and frown when they're sad, I wouldn't know the difference? Oh I don't know...I don't quite know how to fix it although I know what you mean linmark.
And I should deal with the comma-craze, especially for the last sentence yes...
Also, at the very end I was going to add some version of : "Because in all honesty, all I want from my future to be is happy - hopefully happy enough to cry" and add something about...how I the only way I know to be happy is by studying and achieving my dream. Does that make the whole essay a bit corny? Is it better with or without it?
And thank to all of you very much!!!