Writing Feedback / Education: compare and contrast state-run and privately-owned [NEW]

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Having a good education is one of the most important major things that people tend to get . As a passport to better life parents always want to guarantee the education of their children by choosing the best school for them. Many people now talk about private schools as an alternative for the run state while other argue. What are the differences between run-state and private school?

First of all, in all over the word people discuss the problem of identity and the role of local school in teaching children their own identity and how to save it while the private school base in other subjects such as international languages and other things. In addition to this, private schools need a lot of money and many families can not offer these amounts for their children so they have only to choose the state run.

But in the other hand we must say that owner school became more convenient nowadays because they teach their students some important subjects. for example in many run state students learn only their own language and they spent other time studying other languages for higher school. In contrast also with run state, the owner school makes students ready to go to other counties to continue their studies by teaching them general subjects and international languages.

Both run state and private school have their feature and problems and people choose between them referring to need and ability. I think that either state-run and private school are good and can play the role of teaching. Only students have to benefited their time and avoid wasting it.

Writing Feedback / Smog: causes and solutions [5]

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Smog is a type of air pollution which can cover the air of an area causing a lot of problem and stress for people. What are the important causes and solutions for smog?

Smog is caused by many factors. First cause is the gas released by engine to regroup in the air constituting big pollution, this includes smock released by vehicles, factories and others diesel users. Second cause is open burning of. It is a natural cause which menaces many counties in the world. The fire forest might be caused by a natural cause such as an increase of temperature and it always a lot of smocks. The last cause is the waste such as rubbish and used oil which we throw in some places where they are exposed to the sunlight and after some times it transfers to dangerous gases invading our nature by causing a lot of smog. These the most important causes of smog.

The solutions of preventing smog are important and have to be done by everyone to protect our nature. The first solution is to transfer factories outside of the city to avoid the regropement of smock in the atmosphere of the city. The second solution is to try to decrease the using of diesel vehicle as more as we can by using solar energy or other source of energy which are friendlier to the nature. The last solution is to try some solution for our waste such as burry them in the sand. There are more solutions that we can propose but these are the most important ones.

As a big problem menacing our nature, we have to work together against smog to protect our environment by avoiding the causes and applying the solutions.