serendipity11
Nov 7, 2010
Undergraduate / "enthusiastic philosophy teacher" -Recommendataion [5]
any staff, give me a comment please...!
any staff, give me a comment please...!
serendipity11
Nov 6, 2010
Undergraduate / "enthusiastic philosophy teacher" -Recommendataion [5]
I met Ye-ji in her 8th grade year in Ethics class. Ye-ji, at her first semester of 8th grade, was near perfect in her assignments and was always prepared for class. I once lectured on "The little Prince" written by Saint-Exupery and gave the class an assignment, for which they were required to write a conte with 'Reunion with the Little Prince.' X's conte, although it was little shorter than expected, conveyed an implicative message to the reader. Also, Ye-ji always actively participated in class and shown excellent concentration and cooperation. Further, she was well prepared for the classroom debate on 'The establishment of the president Park Jung Hee memorial,' and outperformed the rest of the students in the class.
On the 2nd semester, Ye-ji's class preparation got even more enthusiastic and her assignments set examples to the class. Love poems, letter-style book reports , and assignments on critical writing expressed her wittness and lively imagination. On the other hand, when Ye-ji studied on 'The Crusades' for her individual research project, she scrupulously wrote down her research results on her research notes. She did a superb job organizing the key concepts so that her report was not only substantial in content, but also the organization was solid. She adequately utilized pictures and maps to create her PPT slides and gave a neat presentation on her topic.
I corrected.
'letter-style book reports' was an activity which students wrote letter to the author or to characters in the book. but i have no idea with how to insert this information...
I met Ye-ji in her 8th grade year in Ethics class. Ye-ji, at her first semester of 8th grade, was near perfect in her assignments and was always prepared for class. I once lectured on "The little Prince" written by Saint-Exupery and gave the class an assignment, for which they were required to write a conte with 'Reunion with the Little Prince.' X's conte, although it was little shorter than expected, conveyed an implicative message to the reader. Also, Ye-ji always actively participated in class and shown excellent concentration and cooperation. Further, she was well prepared for the classroom debate on 'The establishment of the president Park Jung Hee memorial,' and outperformed the rest of the students in the class.
On the 2nd semester, Ye-ji's class preparation got even more enthusiastic and her assignments set examples to the class. Love poems, letter-style book reports , and assignments on critical writing expressed her wittness and lively imagination. On the other hand, when Ye-ji studied on 'The Crusades' for her individual research project, she scrupulously wrote down her research results on her research notes. She did a superb job organizing the key concepts so that her report was not only substantial in content, but also the organization was solid. She adequately utilized pictures and maps to create her PPT slides and gave a neat presentation on her topic.
I corrected.
'letter-style book reports' was an activity which students wrote letter to the author or to characters in the book. but i have no idea with how to insert this information...
serendipity11
Nov 5, 2010
Undergraduate / "enthusiastic philosophy teacher" -Recommendataion [5]
Are there any grammatical error? or how this recommendation can be improved?
comment please!
I met X in her 8th grade year in Ethics class. X, at her first semester of 8th grade, was near perfect in her assignments and was always prepared for class. I once gave a lecture on "The little Prince" written by Saint-Exupery and gave the class an assignment asking them to write a conte with 'Reunion with the Little Prince.' Her conte, although it was a little short, had an implicative message within. Also, X always actively participated in class and shown excellent concentration and cooperation. To add on, in a class-debate on 'The establishment of the president Park Jung Hee memorial,' she stood out from the rest of the class by preparing elaborately.
On the 2nd semester, X's class preparation got even more enthusiastic and her assignments set examples to the class. Love poems, letter-style book reports, and critical writing assignments expressed her wit and lively imagination. On the other hand, when X studied on 'The Crusades' for her individual research project, she scrupulously wrote down her research results on her research notes. She did a superb job organizing the key concepts so that her report was not only substantial in content, but also the organization was solid. She adequately utilized pictures and maps to create her PPT slides and gave a neat presentation on her topic.
I met X again in a class called "Life and Philosophy" in her senior year. "Life and Philosophy" is a class that focuses on stimulating the student's communication and thinking skills, and the class grow their abilities to reflect on our lives, cultures, and knowledge. X was a student interested in various aspects of the world and enthusiastic in her studies. Not to mention her exceptional communicational skills, outstanding leadership, and self-led learning abilities.
On the first semester, she participated actively when we were studying about a chapter on 'happiness.' In a class debate on 'whether should we publicize the name and face of a criminal before the court's ruling or not,' she made important comments on the affirmative side and wrote a splendid essay on the subject. She also took initiative in participating in research and presentations on scientific theories.
On the second semester, she reflected deeply on our experiences and knowledge while the class was studying about chapters on 'Can our experience give us perfect knowledge,' and 'What is truth?' On a chapter on 'Mcdonaldization,' we had a moment of introspection on the rationality of the modern society and pondered on ways to overcome the irrationality within rationality.
Over the year, she always showed diligence in group discussions, taking notes, and paying attention to class. According to the peer evaluation that her group mates gave to her, she was "Always enthusiastic and leads the group in group activities."
Are there any grammatical error? or how this recommendation can be improved?
comment please!
I met X in her 8th grade year in Ethics class. X, at her first semester of 8th grade, was near perfect in her assignments and was always prepared for class. I once gave a lecture on "The little Prince" written by Saint-Exupery and gave the class an assignment asking them to write a conte with 'Reunion with the Little Prince.' Her conte, although it was a little short, had an implicative message within. Also, X always actively participated in class and shown excellent concentration and cooperation. To add on, in a class-debate on 'The establishment of the president Park Jung Hee memorial,' she stood out from the rest of the class by preparing elaborately.
On the 2nd semester, X's class preparation got even more enthusiastic and her assignments set examples to the class. Love poems, letter-style book reports, and critical writing assignments expressed her wit and lively imagination. On the other hand, when X studied on 'The Crusades' for her individual research project, she scrupulously wrote down her research results on her research notes. She did a superb job organizing the key concepts so that her report was not only substantial in content, but also the organization was solid. She adequately utilized pictures and maps to create her PPT slides and gave a neat presentation on her topic.
I met X again in a class called "Life and Philosophy" in her senior year. "Life and Philosophy" is a class that focuses on stimulating the student's communication and thinking skills, and the class grow their abilities to reflect on our lives, cultures, and knowledge. X was a student interested in various aspects of the world and enthusiastic in her studies. Not to mention her exceptional communicational skills, outstanding leadership, and self-led learning abilities.
On the first semester, she participated actively when we were studying about a chapter on 'happiness.' In a class debate on 'whether should we publicize the name and face of a criminal before the court's ruling or not,' she made important comments on the affirmative side and wrote a splendid essay on the subject. She also took initiative in participating in research and presentations on scientific theories.
On the second semester, she reflected deeply on our experiences and knowledge while the class was studying about chapters on 'Can our experience give us perfect knowledge,' and 'What is truth?' On a chapter on 'Mcdonaldization,' we had a moment of introspection on the rationality of the modern society and pondered on ways to overcome the irrationality within rationality.
Over the year, she always showed diligence in group discussions, taking notes, and paying attention to class. According to the peer evaluation that her group mates gave to her, she was "Always enthusiastic and leads the group in group activities."
serendipity11
Nov 5, 2010
Undergraduate / "Computer: want to be a computer engineer" admissions essay [4]
'Currently I am unsure of what specialization of computer engineering that I would like to contribute to. However, I know that whatever I do, I want to contribute to society in a positive way.'
I mena in this part you looks ambivalent.
'unsure' sounds you are not passionate about something.
I mean this part can be improved by saying that you are interested in so many part so you don't know what you'll specialize.
'Currently I am unsure of what specialization of computer engineering that I would like to contribute to. However, I know that whatever I do, I want to contribute to society in a positive way.'
I mena in this part you looks ambivalent.
'unsure' sounds you are not passionate about something.
I mean this part can be improved by saying that you are interested in so many part so you don't know what you'll specialize.
serendipity11
Nov 5, 2010
Undergraduate / "participating in quizzes" - Commonapp Basic Essay [4]
I think it is a good topic but you need to write 'how the quizzes affected you'.
I mean, common app short essay should contain how the activities affected you; not jsut simply stating prize you got which the admission officers are not interested in.
I think it is a good topic but you need to write 'how the quizzes affected you'.
I mean, common app short essay should contain how the activities affected you; not jsut simply stating prize you got which the admission officers are not interested in.
serendipity11
Oct 30, 2010
Undergraduate / Difficulty in writing details of each extracurricular activity [100 characters only?] [7]
really? i thought in 'position held' I could write that 'club president'; i was the club president of an amnesty international club.
Can't I write it? Am I wrong?
look forward your response.
thanks!
really? i thought in 'position held' I could write that 'club president'; i was the club president of an amnesty international club.
Can't I write it? Am I wrong?
look forward your response.
thanks!
serendipity11
Oct 21, 2010
Undergraduate / Difficulty in writing details of each extracurricular activity [100 characters only?] [7]
Thanks danado0ona.
Since I already have 12 different activities I cannot divide the single activity.
I think I better use the additional information area.
thanks for your response.
However, what does 'the position held' exactly means?
(please understand me because I am am international student.)
Thanks danado0ona.
Since I already have 12 different activities I cannot divide the single activity.
I think I better use the additional information area.
thanks for your response.
However, what does 'the position held' exactly means?
(please understand me because I am am international student.)
serendipity11
Oct 20, 2010
Undergraduate / Difficulty in writing details of each extracurricular activity [100 characters only?] [7]
I am completing common application online and I have difficulty completing a 'school activities' tab. I have to wrtie 'Details&Accomplishments' of each activities but the problem is ONLY 100characters are available.
I wrote about Amneesty International club. And its 'details and acoomplishments' go like this.
"Amnesty International, I did two big projects: Human rights in N.Korea and violation of human rights in China"
this is already over 100 characters; it is 111 characters.
(position held, honor, participation period and approxmate time spent don't need to be included since there are special area for them)
I have no idea what I should write since I can write only 100 characters.
what should be included?
Or do you think it is better to use 'Additional Information area'?
If I use 'Additional Information area', then should I write "see Additional Information area" in the space where 'Details&Accomplishments' should be written?
(Still, what should I write for details and accomplishments?)
look forward your response,
thanks.
I am completing common application online and I have difficulty completing a 'school activities' tab. I have to wrtie 'Details&Accomplishments' of each activities but the problem is ONLY 100characters are available.
I wrote about Amneesty International club. And its 'details and acoomplishments' go like this.
"Amnesty International, I did two big projects: Human rights in N.Korea and violation of human rights in China"
this is already over 100 characters; it is 111 characters.
(position held, honor, participation period and approxmate time spent don't need to be included since there are special area for them)
I have no idea what I should write since I can write only 100 characters.
what should be included?
Or do you think it is better to use 'Additional Information area'?
If I use 'Additional Information area', then should I write "see Additional Information area" in the space where 'Details&Accomplishments' should be written?
(Still, what should I write for details and accomplishments?)
look forward your response,
thanks.