pollyg
Nov 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay: Ban on smoking in public places is a must! [5]
Hello everyone! I need feedback on the following topic:
There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smokers but for non-smokers who inhale other people's smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people's freedom of action. What are your views?
Nowadays smoking has turned into a global problem. About one third of the world's population, including adults and underaged (teenagers mostly) in this number, smokes cigarettes, which is a disturbingly scary and big amount. It is the 21st century's epidemic.
In my opinion, smoking must be banned in public places, because other than causing health problems to themselves as smokers, they also affect non-smokers' health, especially children's and infants' who inhale cigarette smoke, which is very bad at such an early stage of their lives. Moreover, inhaling smoke causes more health problems and damage to non-smokers than it does to smokers.
Furthermore, if the authorities ban smoking in public places, smokers will say this is discrimination against them. They are not right, it would be better this way, because ruining the health of the future is way worse than what they call "restricting their freedom of action".
I think smokers should not be that selfish by saying that such bans are discriminatory, because actually they don't appreciate non-smokers' need and choice - having a healthy life with no cigarette smoke in it. They decided to smoke and demolish their health slowly, but this does not mean they should do this to other people.
Because actually smoking is this - causing constant damage to your body and health, for example people decrease their life expectancy, cause themselves different types of cancer, the most popular of which are lung cancer and oral cancer, impotence and many more diseases.
If we need to be more drastic, not only smoking should be banned, but also tobacco production should be forbidden, because it does not give anything praiseworthy to humans.
Hello everyone! I need feedback on the following topic:
There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smokers but for non-smokers who inhale other people's smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people's freedom of action. What are your views?
Nowadays smoking has turned into a global problem. About one third of the world's population, including adults and underaged (teenagers mostly) in this number, smokes cigarettes, which is a disturbingly scary and big amount. It is the 21st century's epidemic.
In my opinion, smoking must be banned in public places, because other than causing health problems to themselves as smokers, they also affect non-smokers' health, especially children's and infants' who inhale cigarette smoke, which is very bad at such an early stage of their lives. Moreover, inhaling smoke causes more health problems and damage to non-smokers than it does to smokers.
Furthermore, if the authorities ban smoking in public places, smokers will say this is discrimination against them. They are not right, it would be better this way, because ruining the health of the future is way worse than what they call "restricting their freedom of action".
I think smokers should not be that selfish by saying that such bans are discriminatory, because actually they don't appreciate non-smokers' need and choice - having a healthy life with no cigarette smoke in it. They decided to smoke and demolish their health slowly, but this does not mean they should do this to other people.
Because actually smoking is this - causing constant damage to your body and health, for example people decrease their life expectancy, cause themselves different types of cancer, the most popular of which are lung cancer and oral cancer, impotence and many more diseases.
If we need to be more drastic, not only smoking should be banned, but also tobacco production should be forbidden, because it does not give anything praiseworthy to humans.
