Undergraduate / "Torn Between Two Cultures: Vietnam and America" - Rutgers University [4]

Hi, This is my first time on Essayforum and I'm hoping I would receive some help. I would like advice on my college application to Rutgers, eg weak sentences, grammar, etc.

Thank you!
EDIT: Also, looking for dos and don'ts for essays. Trying to add some originality, I attempted some humor/wit in my essay, though at the same time, having a meaning behind it.

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Essay:
Coming from other countries, my parents would naturally force me into the culture they were raised. As a child, my parents would always tell me: "Take responsibility. Try new things." My journey called life became a rollercoaster of peculiarity; I was torn between two different cultures.

I began to appreciate my heritage when I visited the birthplace of my parents, Vietnam, at the age of seven. This opened my eyes to a brand new experience. I soon realized that the world was not as simple as I believed. Spoiled by the materialistic culture of America, I failed to acknowledge the culture of my family; I began to value the traditions of my birthright, and even more, willing to learn from them.

Growing up, I was a gregarious and witty child, always being assertive and outgoing. However, it was not long until I gained the title: "The awkward Asian kid" as an adolescent. High school became a whole new experience for me. I finally began to understand the words my parents once enlighten me with when I was a child. The words that once meant "eating something different for lunch" now changed me into a diversified person. I have never considered joining a sport; however, I became co-captain of Ultimate Frisbee and am active in soccer almost year-round. All my life, I have lacked creativity in the arts; but in attempt to meet new people and improve myself, I joined Yearbook Club and became a respected member within a year. Even though I am attempting to expand my horizon to a new culture, I still do not forget where my roots originate from. I have been a member, and now officer, of Asian Culture Club, to bear in mind how I was able to overcome the tribulations I once had to deal with.

With Rutgers University's vibrant and diverse community, I can contribute the two different cultures that I have established throughout my life. By including myself as a part of Rutgers University, I anticipate demystifying and discovering the experiences of others as well as sharing the experiences of my own. Then, upon graduation from Rutgers University, I would hope to be off the rollercoaster that had misled throughout my journey.