Undergraduate / 'How could I have Epilepsy' - FSU admissions essay: [6]

And here's my essay:

The pillars of Florida State University are "Vires, Artes, Mores". Which when translated into Latin mean "Strength, Intellect, Character". They are all excellent qualities one would love to possess. More specifically, who I am is embodied in Vires, because I am a strong person in every matter of the word. Physically, I believe I can help lift heavy objects with ease. Morally, I fight for what I believe in even if everyone around me begs to differ. I will not change who I am for others. Mentally I am I am sure that I am abundantly strong. This did not come easily, however. Recently I had to have a lot of strength to go through a dramatic shift in my life. I quickly evolved from a teenager who thinks she is invincible; to someone who was holding on by a string. During just a normal day of happiness, I had a seizure-so everyone says. During this troubling time, I cracked my skull, slept for five days in the hospital, and awoke wondering where I was. I was completely confused about what had happened over those days and I was in absolute denial of the possibility that this first seizure could also be an early manifestation of Epilepsy. So was everyone in my family. How could I have Epilepsy? Months later this diagnosis was confirmed. Feeling depressed, hopeless, and different, I felt I was doomed to have an awful life. I reminded myself not to be naive, and believe I am immune to anything. During this past year, I have learned a lot about my own disorder. I was left with anti-seizure medications, but no instruction manual on how to deal with my newfound vulnerability. I worry every day about seizures, because they are spontaneous. It is with strength that I have the ability to realize the positive things this disorder has brought onto me. It has taught me to enjoy life more, and to take it for what it is worth.

Life is precious and it can vanish at any moment. I may have to endure something in which the average person has been spared, but that does not mean

I cannot have as good a life as the average person. It made me come to the realization that this is me, this disorder is a part of me in which I cannot erase but does not define me. I would blush whenever my Mother had mentioned it to anyone, but now I can casually tell people if they ask. It is just like telling someone I have a dog and a cat. It took "Vires", but I was able to overcome my hardships. I hope that I can be an inspiration to others who are stricken with Epilepsy. I want to be able to teach others that without strength to push through and remain positive, it is going to be hard to obtain happiness in this life. I believe Florida State University is a place I could receive a strong education.

IS THE CONTENT OKAY? Did I answer the question validly.. or is it like a pity-fest? Thanks.