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Apr 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / Sports professionals are able to make more money than other occupations [3]
Hi, all, nice to see you all, could you help to examin my essay?
Topic:
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
My essay:
In modern society, sports have became a profession, and it is fairly easy for sports surper stars to earn huge amount money every year. Some people feel they are deserve for good payment while others consider it is an unfair distribution of human welfare. Let us examine these two points of view before give my option.
The people who think althletes get more beyond what they are sopposed to obtain come up with many examples, arranging from advertisement to attending champion. They believe it is too simple for sports man earn money, all they have to do are printing name or symbol of the company who paid them on their suit or recommeding goods in the screen of television, or just win chmpionship to get rewards. They are unable to improve technology like scientis, not able to produce goods like worker and construct buildings like engineer. Wealth of society would not increase because of their effort. Why they can get great deal more money than others.
However the althlete advocates would dispute that the good payment is the consequence of long term harsh training. As we known there are thousands and hundreds althletes all around world, in order to win championship to become super starts, many sports man have to accept professional training at early age far away from their home. When other children are playing games happily with their parents, these little sports men are doing rote excercises in the playground; while their conterparts are hanging out with their friends, they have to endure coach's criticism. Even though they dedicate their youth to sports, only small proportion of them will become success althletes, while others will be unknown and unsung. In addition, although be not able to add society wealth, they do make our life more colorful. Watching a close match makes us excited and refreshes our minds expecially after whole day's hard work.
In my conclusion, although sports professionals are able to make more money than other occupations, they also sacrifice a lot which others can not endure. They deserve what they have.
Hi, all, nice to see you all, could you help to examin my essay?
Topic:
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
My essay:
In modern society, sports have became a profession, and it is fairly easy for sports surper stars to earn huge amount money every year. Some people feel they are deserve for good payment while others consider it is an unfair distribution of human welfare. Let us examine these two points of view before give my option.
The people who think althletes get more beyond what they are sopposed to obtain come up with many examples, arranging from advertisement to attending champion. They believe it is too simple for sports man earn money, all they have to do are printing name or symbol of the company who paid them on their suit or recommeding goods in the screen of television, or just win chmpionship to get rewards. They are unable to improve technology like scientis, not able to produce goods like worker and construct buildings like engineer. Wealth of society would not increase because of their effort. Why they can get great deal more money than others.
However the althlete advocates would dispute that the good payment is the consequence of long term harsh training. As we known there are thousands and hundreds althletes all around world, in order to win championship to become super starts, many sports man have to accept professional training at early age far away from their home. When other children are playing games happily with their parents, these little sports men are doing rote excercises in the playground; while their conterparts are hanging out with their friends, they have to endure coach's criticism. Even though they dedicate their youth to sports, only small proportion of them will become success althletes, while others will be unknown and unsung. In addition, although be not able to add society wealth, they do make our life more colorful. Watching a close match makes us excited and refreshes our minds expecially after whole day's hard work.
In my conclusion, although sports professionals are able to make more money than other occupations, they also sacrifice a lot which others can not endure. They deserve what they have.
