ing595
May 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Is international sport cup is really important to our life?" - IELTS [7]
Really appreciate for your advice. THank you so much!
Really appreciate for your advice. THank you so much!
ing595
May 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Is international sport cup is really important to our life?" - IELTS [7]
Hi guys, I just student who study IELTS
So... I know my eassy is mess but,if U guys give some advice to me I really appreciate that
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Q. Popular events like the football World Cap and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing interational tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
A. I believe international sport cup is really important to our life. Because international sport cup is can be make the good issue and also make the bad issue. And in my opinion international sport is more make good thing than bad thing. So, this eassy describe some reason about good effect.
First, when the world do something of international sport cup, each country can be make economic benefit. Kind of countrys advert or some companys advert. So, each countrys can be make more visters or tourist than before the international sport cup and also company can be more sell stuffs or something of survice
second thing is like topic says, international sport cup is can be release some thing emotions in a safe way. Sure some guys can be take this sport cup too much seriously side so, make some bad effect. But, almost peoples used sport cup for release the some bad emotions in a safe way. Kind of some stress od sad mood like that. So, international sport cup is good for peoples
And last effent the international sport cup is make relationship to each countrys. international sports in can be make intimate to each countrys. So this effect can be solve about some bad happen between countrys and also make more frandly.
Sure, international sport cup is also can be make the more bad effent or occur dangerous happening. But, basicaly I think international sport cup is made by good opinion and make the many good effect than bad effect. So my opinion is international sport cup is for the world
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Thank you for read.
Hi guys, I just student who study IELTS
So... I know my eassy is mess but,if U guys give some advice to me I really appreciate that
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Q. Popular events like the football World Cap and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing interational tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
A. I believe international sport cup is really important to our life. Because international sport cup is can be make the good issue and also make the bad issue. And in my opinion international sport is more make good thing than bad thing. So, this eassy describe some reason about good effect.
First, when the world do something of international sport cup, each country can be make economic benefit. Kind of countrys advert or some companys advert. So, each countrys can be make more visters or tourist than before the international sport cup and also company can be more sell stuffs or something of survice
second thing is like topic says, international sport cup is can be release some thing emotions in a safe way. Sure some guys can be take this sport cup too much seriously side so, make some bad effect. But, almost peoples used sport cup for release the some bad emotions in a safe way. Kind of some stress od sad mood like that. So, international sport cup is good for peoples
And last effent the international sport cup is make relationship to each countrys. international sports in can be make intimate to each countrys. So this effect can be solve about some bad happen between countrys and also make more frandly.
Sure, international sport cup is also can be make the more bad effent or occur dangerous happening. But, basicaly I think international sport cup is made by good opinion and make the many good effect than bad effect. So my opinion is international sport cup is for the world
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Thank you for read.