Undergraduate / Why I want to become a oncology Nurse admission [4]

I recently graduated nursing school (RN). There is a paid internship to become an oncology certified specialty nurse. It is pretty competitive so any help will be appreciated. I am falling short of the required 500 words, I am stuck english is not my cup of tea.

(Positive and negative feedback is GREATLY appreciated!)

500 words

Why I want to be an oncology nurse
What is inspiration? Inspiration is maintaining high spirits and hope for a new life despite a diagnosis of cancer. It is the feeling that wakes us up each morning longing for a fulfilling day of caring for others less fortunate than ourselves, yearning for their acceptance through a smile of gratitude.

He was my inspiration for a career dedicated to the needs of others during their darkest and most precious hours. He was my friend and a positive force in my desire to become an oncology nurse. When I was twelve years old he was diagnosed with multiple myeloma. Although initially healthy looking, as time passed his vulnerable and fragile health became evident. A terminal diagnosis was his misfortune that never lessened his love of life. Although cancer ravaged his physical body, his mental and psychological faculties never failed him. His disease in effect became his inspiration for life and a reservoir of love for all those who supported him.

His outward high spirits and uplifting humor were betrayed by the sadness that emanated from his big brown eyes. The emotional and physical toll of numerous unsuccessful stem cell transplants could not weaken his resolve for life. Humor and laughter permeated all who came in contact with him during his final days. Cancer was a stranger that took my dear friend away from me but he never let anyone in those final days feel like a stranger. He was all alone with this stranger in the beginning but in the process acquired the care and compassion of a new medical family. His open heart simply strengthened their resolve to nurse him to health.

I want to be an oncology nurse because I want to be close to patients in the beginning when the unknown and unfamiliar reinforce our worst fears and insecurities. I want to be there in the middle when patients realize and accept their vulnerability to a disease that threatens their well-being. I want to be there in the end when patients and their families triumph over disease, accept a life changed forever, or solemnly say goodbye to a loved one. Inspiration for life shall be my guide as an oncology nurse always striving for positivity, compassion, and commitment to all of my patients.

As an oncology nurse I will always strive for the compassionate care of all my patients, committed to the vulnerable and suffering, guiding with positivity. Through compassionate attention, caring and listening the stranger that changed their life will be more familiar and not as threatening. His inspiration will be a template for a life dedicated to the needs of others.

positive and negetive feedback is greatly valued.Thanks again for your help