Undergraduate / "a strong campus community and freedom" - Why Brown Essay - help? [3]

For as long as I can remember, I have gone to a big school. A school where classes were big enough that kids could sleep in the back the whole period without the teacher noticing, or put their ipod headphones in and cover them with their hair. I could have switched to a smaller private school, but I always feared that along with the uniforms I would lose the privilege of creative expression, that I would be forced to convene to even stricter standards. I am drawn to Brown because of its combination of a strong campus community and the freedom to create a curriculum you feel would challenge you best, with guidance from faculty members. Brown also has many community service opportunities at its and diverse global study abroad programs. Both community service and traveling and learning about other cultures have always been very important to me. For these reasons, I feel that Brown would be a great college for me, and that I would be a good fit for Brown.

help please? feel like this essay is very weak.