Undergraduate / Applicant statement for student exchange programme to UNSW. [3]

There are several grammatical errors you need to fix. Try not to use "new" so much. I suggest you talk a bit more about your credentials and differentiate yourself from others. In addition, I suggest you use specifics to why you want to to UNSW. Incorporate specific names of professors, programs, buildings, etc into your essay. That will allow readers to realize that you have done your research about the school. I give the essay now a C+, B-. Good luck!