shotsofespresso
Sep 3, 2011
Undergraduate / Imaginary Prompt: Tough Essay - environment that is particularly significant to you. [2]
I'd consider changing 'carroty glow' to carrot colored glow.
I also think that the phrase 'in the sky' is unnecessary.
In the last paragraph, you should have 'when the maestro [/i]sang[/i]',instead of sung
Otherwise, I think it's beautifully written.
I'd consider changing 'carroty glow' to carrot colored glow.
I also think that the phrase 'in the sky' is unnecessary.
In the last paragraph, you should have 'when the maestro [/i]sang[/i]',instead of sung
Otherwise, I think it's beautifully written.