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Hi everyone :),
Here is my motivation letter. I have never written any of this before so I hope you guys can help me to correct and perfect it as much as possible. Any comments are welcome :) Please take a look at this and give me some advices ^^ I appreciate any helps.Thank you very much

Dear Madam or Sir,

I wish to apply to the Bachelor in International Business at XXX conducted in January 2012.

*Introduce
"Knowledge is power" is my father's strong faith. Not surprisingly, he never told me any fairy-tale stories but the true ones from his own life about how an orphan could become a PhD. He made me believe in the power of knowledge that could change one's life forever. Hence, I never stop trying to improve my performance at school. This belief helps me to receive a certificate of merit for good performance in the 11th grade and to increase my score, especially in Math, English and Computer Science.

*Reasons to apply
The most important reason for my choice is I love business. My biggest dream is to become a successful CEO for a multinational corporation. Thus, International Business is exactly what I need to pursue to follow my dream.

Additionally, this program seriously aims at practical cases on providing precious experiences to students. For me, practical training in international environment is an integral part of the program's curriculum which will be a competitive advantage over other job candidates.

*Reasons to choose this university
The superior in facility and the fact students at XXX receive professional skills as well as enthusiastic helps from professors completely convince me to choose XXXX.

Not to mention, at XXX, I can build relationships and work with peers from all over the world, which to me definitely will be an amazing memory and also a good start for my business career. Last but not least, since XXX is one of the most beautiful cities in Europe with highest standard living, I expect a chance to live and study there.

* Characteristics and abilities make yourself suitable to the major selected
Born in a poor family, I always did my homework alone without any helps since my parents were always busy to earn a living. I have become familiar with taking responsibility for my own since then. Moreover, I like challenges as they force me to try harder and when it is over, I feel proud of myself.

Years of studying in Vietnam with countless examinations sharpen my ability to work and deal with problems under high pressure.
Not only have I participated in International Volunteer Club for two years but also I did run an English club in my secondary school, which gives me valuable experiences in teamwork and leadership.

* benefits which university can provide to students from studying this major
The curriculum of this program enables students to have a better grounding in many aspects related to business such as Finance, Marketing, Human Resource,..Therefore, students can work in many positions in a company after graduation.

This program seriously aims at practical cases on providing precious experiences to students. For me, practical training in international environment is an integral part of the program's curriculum which will be a competitive advantage over other job candidates.

As a considerable number of students come from all over the world, this is a chance for me to get acquainted with these people and their cultures, tradition and costume.

* Conclude
To sum up, I believe that my characteristics and intellectual abilities along with high motivation will exceed your expectations. What is more, after careful consideration, I have a confidence that XXX would be a brilliant choice for me. Admittedly, I have dreamed of studying abroad for years. I wish to be a part of your prestigious university where I can make my dream come true.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.

Sincerely yours.