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Oct 4, 2011
Undergraduate / (Photography)- Elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities [2]
This is my short essay for Common App. Currently I have 906 characters and 161 words.
I feel like my last sentence is too abrupt but don't know how to alter it. Any suggestions to my essay? I welcome any criticisms if it would help my essay!
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
"One, two, three!" was the phrase that was most spoken in the Robinson Photo Club which I found in 2009. Every other week, all the members gather around at school and took pictures of friends, teachers, trees, flower, just anything we could find. Looking into my camera, I saw the world in different perspectives as if I were an entirely different person. This helped me to realize that there is no one specific perception in which people view the world and that understanding different perspectives will further broaden my own understanding of the world and help me to value opinions that are different from my own. Looking into the viewfinder of my camera, it encouraged me to be more meticulous in my daily life and to be sensitive to all the small details around me. The small black camera of my own taught me about the understanding of the world and my Photo Club helped to incorporate it in my life.
This is my short essay for Common App. Currently I have 906 characters and 161 words.
I feel like my last sentence is too abrupt but don't know how to alter it. Any suggestions to my essay? I welcome any criticisms if it would help my essay!
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
"One, two, three!" was the phrase that was most spoken in the Robinson Photo Club which I found in 2009. Every other week, all the members gather around at school and took pictures of friends, teachers, trees, flower, just anything we could find. Looking into my camera, I saw the world in different perspectives as if I were an entirely different person. This helped me to realize that there is no one specific perception in which people view the world and that understanding different perspectives will further broaden my own understanding of the world and help me to value opinions that are different from my own. Looking into the viewfinder of my camera, it encouraged me to be more meticulous in my daily life and to be sensitive to all the small details around me. The small black camera of my own taught me about the understanding of the world and my Photo Club helped to incorporate it in my life.