Posts by mrjojo

mrjojo

Nov 11, 2008

Writing Feedback / Prevention is better than therapy-Correct my mistakes in this brief article [3]

Hi Gloria . thanks for your feedback .
actually i didn't want to focus on details . my intention was just to find my grammatical weaknesses that you did help me and i appreciate for it .

when i review my passage and your suggestions , i find out most of my mistakes are on detail and resource that i didn't care of them .

I'll send more essays on this forum and i hope to learn something more of you friends .

mrjojo

Nov 10, 2008

Writing Feedback / Prevention is better than therapy-Correct my mistakes in this brief article [3]

I'll be happy if you guys correct mistakes of below passage whether grammatical or dictation and so ... .

Prevention is better than therapy ,
nowadays this issue has been proven to everyone that prevention has always been better than therapy . The biggest problem in the world of medical science has been the contagious of the HIV virus , mostly among black people throughout the world .

many infected people has been a large number of various experiments by medical scientists .
today in spite of scientist's warning about dangerous influence of not using condoms in sexual relation , some people has been seen to be defiant about the importance of using the condom and its vital roll in prevention of HIV virus .