KoopaFish
Nov 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'My ability to work well with others' - Illinois State Admission [2]
I'd really appreciate it if someone can take the time to go over my essay for any grammar mistakes and maybe give me some feedback on the content in my essay.
Again, thank you so much.
Prompt: This statement should be approximately 500 words and identify and explain the following:
Why you feel Illinois State University is a good fit for your educational goals and your academic strengths and weaknesses
The start of my senior year signaled the beginning of making a life-changing decision-choosing my future university. I've never really thought about where I wanted to go, so I began writing a list of several universities that came to mind with, admittedly, not much knowledge about any of them. It wasn't until I decided that I wanted to major in chemistry that I took a closer look at Illinois State University. Not knowing anyone currently enrolled or having attended Illinois State, I figured the best way to learn a bit about the University's chemistry department was to look at its website. After reading that the Department of Chemistry is a" leading producer of BS and MS chemists", I feel that Illinois State is a step in the right direction for realizing my goal in earning my master's degree in chemistry.
The coursework required for a master's degree in chemistry at Illinois State is rigorous and, even worse, time consuming. Being enrolled in an advanced placement chemistry class during my senior year exposes me to the subject as well as the fast pace and difficulty of a college level course. My success in chemistry class so far makes me confident I'll continue to do well in college, but my greatest academic weakness is my inability to manage time efficiently. Often times I'll start writing an essay and become so immersed in it that when I look at the time, I'll notice several hours have gone by and I still have many more assignments or other activities to do. The frustration from feeling like there isn't enough time in a day to finish everything I want to stems directly from my lack of time management. Instead of looking at my short comings with disdain, I should view them as opportunities to improve myself. Continually striving to improve how I use my time will be an important skill when I become an independent, young adult in college trying to balance my coursework, a part-time job, extracurricular activities, and new friends
Having been a badminton player for three years in high school, I learned the importance of working well with others. The badminton team was a diverse group of girls that didn't have much in common except for loving to play badminton and being able to branch out from my comfort zone is something that will help me to integrate into life at Illinois State. Coming into contact with new people is inevitable and often times I'll be working with someone I don't know on a project or in class. Being able to collaborate with people allows me to see others' unique perspectives and exposes me to different ideas. My ability to work well with others leaves me constantly looking for opportunities to contribute to the success of a group rather than just myself. Hopefully, I'll find myself part of the student body at Illinois State University.
I'd really appreciate it if someone can take the time to go over my essay for any grammar mistakes and maybe give me some feedback on the content in my essay.
Again, thank you so much.
Prompt: This statement should be approximately 500 words and identify and explain the following:
Why you feel Illinois State University is a good fit for your educational goals and your academic strengths and weaknesses
The start of my senior year signaled the beginning of making a life-changing decision-choosing my future university. I've never really thought about where I wanted to go, so I began writing a list of several universities that came to mind with, admittedly, not much knowledge about any of them. It wasn't until I decided that I wanted to major in chemistry that I took a closer look at Illinois State University. Not knowing anyone currently enrolled or having attended Illinois State, I figured the best way to learn a bit about the University's chemistry department was to look at its website. After reading that the Department of Chemistry is a" leading producer of BS and MS chemists", I feel that Illinois State is a step in the right direction for realizing my goal in earning my master's degree in chemistry.
The coursework required for a master's degree in chemistry at Illinois State is rigorous and, even worse, time consuming. Being enrolled in an advanced placement chemistry class during my senior year exposes me to the subject as well as the fast pace and difficulty of a college level course. My success in chemistry class so far makes me confident I'll continue to do well in college, but my greatest academic weakness is my inability to manage time efficiently. Often times I'll start writing an essay and become so immersed in it that when I look at the time, I'll notice several hours have gone by and I still have many more assignments or other activities to do. The frustration from feeling like there isn't enough time in a day to finish everything I want to stems directly from my lack of time management. Instead of looking at my short comings with disdain, I should view them as opportunities to improve myself. Continually striving to improve how I use my time will be an important skill when I become an independent, young adult in college trying to balance my coursework, a part-time job, extracurricular activities, and new friends
Having been a badminton player for three years in high school, I learned the importance of working well with others. The badminton team was a diverse group of girls that didn't have much in common except for loving to play badminton and being able to branch out from my comfort zone is something that will help me to integrate into life at Illinois State. Coming into contact with new people is inevitable and often times I'll be working with someone I don't know on a project or in class. Being able to collaborate with people allows me to see others' unique perspectives and exposes me to different ideas. My ability to work well with others leaves me constantly looking for opportunities to contribute to the success of a group rather than just myself. Hopefully, I'll find myself part of the student body at Illinois State University.
