Undergraduate / 'This multifarious culture' How will your culture and religion contribute to Rutgers? [5]

I would like to start off by saying this is my first ever college essay, and I worked really hard. Whoever edits this, please be as helpful as you can be. Thank you.

"The vivid diversity of Rutgers University shows the limelight of society at its peak. The variety of ethnicities not only creates a learning environment much better but it helps individuals like me interact with others with grace and empathy. My contribution to the diversity of Rutgers will consist of my heritage and devotion to my nation, which is Pakistan. Throughout high school in my years in Pakistan and in the United States, I always embraced my Pakistani background. I did not have any trouble grasping the basic morals and ethics my religon teaches, and to this day I work hard and I am a vigorous member of the Muslim community. To enhance my knowledge of Islam, I took part and became a member of the Muslim Federation of New Jersey. To this day, I go to Saturday classes where the elderly scholars enhance our knowledge of the Prophet Muhammad (PBUH). I performed my community service at the Muslim Federation Center, where I helped elders with their food, clothing, and I also organized various activities for the youth. Throughout the experience, I tried not to get my ego get the best of me, and I will always listen to the wise teachers. My understanding with the Pakistani culture, religion, ethics, and arts would be a outstanding addition to the Rutgers community.

This multifarious culture I mention can benefit me to a tremendous extent; my zest for other religons, cultures and languages can be revamped through the community at Rutgers University. My wish is to always be a responsible member of society, to assimilate my self with all other religion's and Islam itself."