caohoang10
Dec 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I have some engineering background' - Carnegie Mellon University Supplemental [4]
"Although I currently have no experience with mechanical engineering specifically, I do have some engineering background."
I don't think you should talk about this in your essay. They are "smart ENOUGH" to know whether you have any experience from your essay :)
"If I do attend Carnegie Mellon University, I can become the engineer that I want to become."
=> A little awkward, isn't it?
That is my own opinions.
Your essay is looking good though ;)
"Although I currently have no experience with mechanical engineering specifically, I do have some engineering background."
I don't think you should talk about this in your essay. They are "smart ENOUGH" to know whether you have any experience from your essay :)
"If I do attend Carnegie Mellon University, I can become the engineer that I want to become."
=> A little awkward, isn't it?
That is my own opinions.
Your essay is looking good though ;)