HSaifa
Dec 16, 2011
Undergraduate / "Thank goodness!" - Very short Columbia university prompt [4]
Hello all, I was hoping that you could help me edit and improve this essay. It is for Columbia's supplement. Thank you.
Please tell us what you found meaningful about one of the above mentioned books, publications or cultural events.
"... "Thank goodness!" said Bilbo laughing, and handed him the tobacco jar.": so ended my third reading of J.R.R. Tolkien's The Hobbit, one early Saturday morning. Closing the book, I found myself immediately enveloped by the solitude of my surroundings. Alone with my thoughts, it dawned me, more profoundly than it ever had, the extent of Bilbo's transformation throughout the course of the book. Once a diffident, taciturn bungler, Bilbo seemed to have grown braver and more mature towards the end of the tale: all it took was a willingness to step out of his comfort zone. Though I did not have to wrestle giant spiders and wily dragons as Bilbo did, reading The Hobbit compelled me to look at my life and the events that shaped me into who I am today. And so came, a gushing flood of childhood and early pubescent memories. Looking back over the past five to ten years of my life, I no longer see a shy girl who was afraid to recite poems or debate topics of interest in front of crowds; instead, I see a girl who now loves the stage. I no longer see a timid girl who sat in obscurity in class; instead I see a girl who now takes every opportunity to listen and share her thoughts with her teachers and peers.
Reading The Hobbit helped me define the extent of my own personal growth. It is this growth that I will continue to strive for during and beyond my collegiate years, whether it increasing my grade point average or making creamy homemade ice cream even creamier.
Hello all, I was hoping that you could help me edit and improve this essay. It is for Columbia's supplement. Thank you.
Please tell us what you found meaningful about one of the above mentioned books, publications or cultural events.
"... "Thank goodness!" said Bilbo laughing, and handed him the tobacco jar.": so ended my third reading of J.R.R. Tolkien's The Hobbit, one early Saturday morning. Closing the book, I found myself immediately enveloped by the solitude of my surroundings. Alone with my thoughts, it dawned me, more profoundly than it ever had, the extent of Bilbo's transformation throughout the course of the book. Once a diffident, taciturn bungler, Bilbo seemed to have grown braver and more mature towards the end of the tale: all it took was a willingness to step out of his comfort zone. Though I did not have to wrestle giant spiders and wily dragons as Bilbo did, reading The Hobbit compelled me to look at my life and the events that shaped me into who I am today. And so came, a gushing flood of childhood and early pubescent memories. Looking back over the past five to ten years of my life, I no longer see a shy girl who was afraid to recite poems or debate topics of interest in front of crowds; instead, I see a girl who now loves the stage. I no longer see a timid girl who sat in obscurity in class; instead I see a girl who now takes every opportunity to listen and share her thoughts with her teachers and peers.
Reading The Hobbit helped me define the extent of my own personal growth. It is this growth that I will continue to strive for during and beyond my collegiate years, whether it increasing my grade point average or making creamy homemade ice cream even creamier.
