Posts by delljonathan
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Undergraduate /
A question on texas' college topic *an issue of importance* (what to write about?) [3]
I wrote something similar for one of my essays. It's great! The idea is solid, include some real life examples and how this type of community has affected you. From there, highlight the importance of it to you. Well of course, the idea you've chosen is risky and complex, and yet, if you can put it all in a nice form, it would be a very interesting essay. All the best :D
delljonathan Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate /
'packet drink' - the most significant challenge that society faces today? - Stanford [3]
Thank you very much. Yeah sure, will do the editing.
As for your essay, at first glance, it looks very good. I think the term peer pressure could be replaced with something like, "being afraid of disapproval". Well peer pressure doesn't really address the content of your essay. Other than that, I think the essay is just fine. But do ask more people okay :)
Thank you!
delljonathan Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate /
'packet drink' - the most significant challenge that society faces today? - Stanford [3]
What is the most significant challenge that society faces today?
We buy a packet drink, and we throw it away. We buy another packet drink, and we throw it away as well. And this continues. The society is not aware of the amount of resources needed to make one product. For them, conservation of resources is the government's job and not theirs; absolute inanity.
I'm not really sure if this is okay. I hope people would help me correct the errors and comment on the entire writing. Don't be nice to me, just pour out whatever you feel. THANK YOU :D
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Editing Help?
