Writing Feedback / 'homeschooling offers their children more' - Essay Introduction [4]

I think its pretty good. There is a strong thesis, providing 3 examples, and its very arguable.
I think you whould work on how to get readers attention. You should provide real life examples.

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

Yes, but I phrased what I ment to say wrong.
And clearly, you are bragging about being an "A" student after graduating, i am also an "A" student.
i didnt know you were this mean and rude...

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

alright..
and fyi- im not asking you to write the essay for me...
and i appreciate you helping me,,your just not clear for me to understand...Just please use nicer words, what you said was alittle mean and insulting...

thanks for the help

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

ok, how would you rewrite the things you edited in my paper?

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

ok thank you, but I am still struggling on finding 3 points and quotes to use in my essay. Could you please edit the essay I wrote?

Thanks :)

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

how should i fix my essay?

Book Reports / Oedipus the king fate vs. free will help on thesis statement [18]

Both the concept of fate and free will played an intregal part in Oedipus' destruction.
I need 3 points to support it though