ankit_gyawali
Jun 15, 2012
Scholarship / 'proven myself in the past' - 300 Word Scholarship Demonstrating Financial Need [3]
Hello, I have a draft for a scholarship essay I was requested to make. All the good people out here would you please check my draft and say how is it along with some suggestions?? My English is pretty bad since English is not my mother tongue. I would be so happy to hear any suggestions.
I was ordered to write 'a 300 word essay demonstrating your financial need ' in my email.
P.S: I desperately need to get this scholarship because of financial reasons, which I am sure some of you understand. So please don't hesitate to criticize me on how could I improve this essay. I have a deadline approaching so I would be extremely glad for a quick response!
Thanking in advance, and here is the essay-
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My decision after the end of my high school life to enroll in an American University to graduate was a tough one. But I had the full support of my family, my parents being prepared to spend most of their savings for the sake of my study. Getting the Academic Excellence Scholarship from XXX University might have been one of the happiest moments in my life. Being an international student from a still developing country like Nepal even the costs of accommodation and food seems pretty high. I believe that this scholarship could enable me to spend a lot of hour studying rather than doing some on campus job to cover up the accommodation costs incurred, to help my family economically.
I have proven myself in the past and I am ready to do that now. I come from a middle class family. My father works as a Health worker and my mother works as a teacher to cover up our monthly expenses. We live in a semi-urban setting with a pretty normal life. My father is a typical routine worker with his job at 10 to 5. He works very hard, although he does not like to show it. I remember my dad staying up to help me solve math problems with me when I was a kid till late night. His interest in public health and his mathematical genius both inspired my interest in science, particularly in engineering. I caught on to his values of hard work, perseverance, and academic honesty, deepening my respect for him both as my father as well as a professional. Following my dad's example, for me, working hard has been a way of life, not a compulsion. And working hard has made me recognized on my school these previous years. I, getting different scholarships from my school has enabled our family to maintain the economic balance that now is. I sincerely wish I am eligible for this scholarship as this could enable me to have more time to study harder, and prove myself as the most hardworking international student of esteemed XXX University.
Hello, I have a draft for a scholarship essay I was requested to make. All the good people out here would you please check my draft and say how is it along with some suggestions?? My English is pretty bad since English is not my mother tongue. I would be so happy to hear any suggestions.
I was ordered to write 'a 300 word essay demonstrating your financial need ' in my email.
P.S: I desperately need to get this scholarship because of financial reasons, which I am sure some of you understand. So please don't hesitate to criticize me on how could I improve this essay. I have a deadline approaching so I would be extremely glad for a quick response!
Thanking in advance, and here is the essay-
_______________________________
My decision after the end of my high school life to enroll in an American University to graduate was a tough one. But I had the full support of my family, my parents being prepared to spend most of their savings for the sake of my study. Getting the Academic Excellence Scholarship from XXX University might have been one of the happiest moments in my life. Being an international student from a still developing country like Nepal even the costs of accommodation and food seems pretty high. I believe that this scholarship could enable me to spend a lot of hour studying rather than doing some on campus job to cover up the accommodation costs incurred, to help my family economically.
I have proven myself in the past and I am ready to do that now. I come from a middle class family. My father works as a Health worker and my mother works as a teacher to cover up our monthly expenses. We live in a semi-urban setting with a pretty normal life. My father is a typical routine worker with his job at 10 to 5. He works very hard, although he does not like to show it. I remember my dad staying up to help me solve math problems with me when I was a kid till late night. His interest in public health and his mathematical genius both inspired my interest in science, particularly in engineering. I caught on to his values of hard work, perseverance, and academic honesty, deepening my respect for him both as my father as well as a professional. Following my dad's example, for me, working hard has been a way of life, not a compulsion. And working hard has made me recognized on my school these previous years. I, getting different scholarships from my school has enabled our family to maintain the economic balance that now is. I sincerely wish I am eligible for this scholarship as this could enable me to have more time to study harder, and prove myself as the most hardworking international student of esteemed XXX University.
