jessawesomeness
Aug 27, 2012
jessawesomeness
Aug 27, 2012
Undergraduate / Family history inspiration (UCF Essay) ! [5]
Thank you so much Leibe!
What would you recommend to more formal?
Thank you so much Leibe!
What would you recommend to more formal?
jessawesomeness
Aug 26, 2012
Undergraduate / 'a passion of studying Economics' -my personal essay one on a significant experience. [5]
I think this could use more personality, it only says this happened and that happened, not much emotion to it. Elaborate more on your passion and tell the story in way that isnt just he said she said.
I think this could use more personality, it only says this happened and that happened, not much emotion to it. Elaborate more on your passion and tell the story in way that isnt just he said she said.
jessawesomeness
Aug 26, 2012
Undergraduate / Family history inspiration (UCF Essay) ! [5]
Prompt is How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?
I just need proof reading thanks so much!
My family has a humble beginning just like many other Hispanic families. With proudly native Colombian parents, they were two of many hopeful foreigners chasing after the American dream. My father started as a young bike messenger and waiter in New York City and developed a career in aviation where he became the first Colombian pilot of the largest commercial plane in the world, the Airbus A380. As a kid, he would tell me stories of his High school years, playing genius pranks on his friends, and causing chaos to his neighborhood. His fascination with airplanes had always stuck with him when he left home at age 17 to live in the states. Fast-forward 30 years, and hundreds of hours of airtime later, his passport is filled with stamps from every country you didn't even know existed. "Never in a million years I would think I would be where I am." He always says. Similar stories to my Dad have been told endless amount of times. Rags to riches and even the coveted American dream all relate to what everyone strives to be, successful and happy, exactly what my Dad became. When I was little, he was the coolest person in the world that I want to be like. An independent, adventurous, open-minded young lady is how I imagine describing myself to my grandchildren when I'm aged and wrinkly. My old mans motto is work hard, and play harder, a motto that he still follows to this day; Living life to the fullest is cliché but no statement is truer. My inspiration from my father, huge potential for success and an even bigger love for traveling makes me, me, Jessica.
Prompt is How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?
I just need proof reading thanks so much!
My family has a humble beginning just like many other Hispanic families. With proudly native Colombian parents, they were two of many hopeful foreigners chasing after the American dream. My father started as a young bike messenger and waiter in New York City and developed a career in aviation where he became the first Colombian pilot of the largest commercial plane in the world, the Airbus A380. As a kid, he would tell me stories of his High school years, playing genius pranks on his friends, and causing chaos to his neighborhood. His fascination with airplanes had always stuck with him when he left home at age 17 to live in the states. Fast-forward 30 years, and hundreds of hours of airtime later, his passport is filled with stamps from every country you didn't even know existed. "Never in a million years I would think I would be where I am." He always says. Similar stories to my Dad have been told endless amount of times. Rags to riches and even the coveted American dream all relate to what everyone strives to be, successful and happy, exactly what my Dad became. When I was little, he was the coolest person in the world that I want to be like. An independent, adventurous, open-minded young lady is how I imagine describing myself to my grandchildren when I'm aged and wrinkly. My old mans motto is work hard, and play harder, a motto that he still follows to this day; Living life to the fullest is cliché but no statement is truer. My inspiration from my father, huge potential for success and an even bigger love for traveling makes me, me, Jessica.