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hahieu   
Apr 13, 2007
Scholarship / the most advanced education, Essay for Scholarship! [4]

Dear Sarah,

With your tips, I have just restructured my essay to answer this three questions:

1. Why do you want to do the master's degree programme to which you have been admitted?

2. What do you hope to achieve for your organization by doing this master's degree program?

3. Describe your plans for when you return to your organization. How will you put your new skills and knowledge to work?

I also would like to ask you some questions here:

1. Is this needed to write a long essay as I usually see in this forum?

2. How a scholarship applied essay should be?

3. Do you have any comment upon my writing style?

4. Do you think my below essay need a close paragraph?
hahieu   
Apr 12, 2007
Scholarship / the most advanced education, Essay for Scholarship! [4]

Both of my parents were teachers in a secondary school at Quangnam, a poor province in the Centre of Vietnam. However, in 1990, they decided to quit their dream job and moved to Danang City with hope that their children could have better study opportunities. Since I was a child, my father has pointed up the only way to escape poverty is by getting a good education. With that guideline, I have tried my best to be the top student of every class, from the senior to the university. Furthermore, a dream has also been bigger and bigger in my mind, which is being a researcher in the field of Environmental Study.

The reason of my chose to be a specialist in the field of Environmental study is the awareness of the rising environmental problems in my country and the region. Vietnam, especially Ho Chi Minh City, is in its industrialization with the terrific development of production. However, accompanying environmental problems become threats to our lives. Everyday, Ho Chi Minh City receive around 200.000 m3 of industrial waste water and 17.000 m3 of waste water from hospitals. Unfortunately, there is approximately 40% of that amount of waste water is treated before released to the natural environment (Ho Chi Minh City Environmental Protection Agency - HEPA, 2006).

The environment of the South of Vietnam is not only under the big pressure of the industrialization but also threaten by the contaminations come from natural disasters. Mekong Delta brings to the peoples here a large source of water. However, there is only 40% the Mekong Delta peoples have safe drinking water. Furthermore, the annual flood which is the biggest natural disaster in Mekong Delta also brings many environmental sanitation issues, especially water contamination. The sicknesses happen in the flood season are usually because of bad quality water using. In the serious floods in 2000, 2001, 2002 there are 1,683 peoples died and 72% of them are under 16 years' old children. (UNICEF Vietnam)

For solving these challenged problems to reach for the sustainable development, we need not only strategies but also human resources for environmental protection. We are urgent to have well-trained environmental managers and engineers for a further treatment and prevention, especially in the field of water quality protection.

With the outstanding graduate result from the University of Natural Science, Vietnam National University in Ho Chi Minh City, I was accepted to work in The Department of Environmental Technology - The University of Technical Education as a Teaching Assistant - Researcher. This Department was newly formed in the February 2007 and it is designed to be the Faculty of Environmental Technology in the next 5 years. I am proud of being one of the firsts who set up its facilities. However, the most important element for forming this later Faculty of Environmental Technology is human resource building. That thinking also makes me decide to apply to the Master Course of XYZ in XYZ University.

Studying in XYZ, I have great opportunity to approach one of the most advance educations in the world. Taking reference at the study program in YYY in XYZ University make me strongly believe that I will not only well trained the specialty knowledge but also effective teaching methods and research skill as well from the experienced professors. I could apply this knowledge to my teaching and researching. Beside, I wish to apply my new knowledge and skills to participate the Water Quality Management projects in Ho Chi Minh City and Mekong Delta as well with the hope of contributing to improving the life quality of the peoples here. Furthermore, studying in an international environment brings me chances to join in global environmental projects. By this way, I can continuous update the knowledge and help to solve the international environmental issues.
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