Scholarship / Discuss your short and long-term goals. Are some of them related? Which are prioritie [4]

hmm.. heart touching story...
there are few errors though...
1. ... know the road I'm going to walk in the future is very challengechallenging .
2. Even though, it is stressful, but I have learned the meaning of diligence, I believe if I work hadhard , it is possible to get an "A".

rest.. vocabulary used is appropriate and apt. Just try to bring down the essay into short paragraphs, so that it would not look monotonous.