Undergraduate / NYU SUPP: is a wage in dollars worth more than witnessing your children grow up? [2]

I need feedback, please. I want to know If you guys believe I am answering the question fully.

I will be talking about the border and its illegal immigrants.

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As flocks of people pass me by with carts full of fried maize, tacos, and tamales, and children with colorful attires trot along selling Virgin of Guadalupe sculptures and paintings, and before I go into customs, I take a last glance at the city's dynamism, the merge of cultures, and the different backgrounds that make my border town, Mexicali, home to a myriad of immigrants. I see Guatemalans, Nicaraguans, and mostly Mexicans, discreetly throw a rope over the border fence with hope that its attachment will promise an opportunity to become invisible. Some will cross, but others will dissipate into the crowd to see their dreams fading away along with daylight as the day closes on us all.

With the best of intentions, and in attempt to uphold their family, illegal immigrants from middle and southern America try to provide a better future for their children. In their pursuit, however, they not only lead to the disintegration of their family, but lose their identity and security in the process. They live with fear of deportation, and they lose their culture and their name. For what I wonder: is a wage in dollars worth more than witnessing your children grow up? I then drive home, intrigued about the difference between their reasons and mine to come to the U.S., hoping that one day, when I professionally fulfill myself, I will be able to glance back at the border, and make a difference for all those people with whom I share a culture but who don't have the same opportunities as I do.