Writing Feedback / IELTS: the opposite trend; THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN [NEW]

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Task 1: Line Graph - Unemployment in US and Japan
THE GRAPH SHOWS THE UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN BETWEEN MARCH 1993 AND MARCH 1999.

MY REPORT:
The line graph illustrates the trend of unemployment in US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
According to the picture it is clearly that there was a significant gap between unemployment rates in mentioned countries. But, the figures became approximately the same at the end of the period.

Starting from 2.5 unemployment rate in Japan increased gradually and peaked in late April 1996 at 4.4%.
After a slight decrease in May we observe the recovery at the end of 1996. The percentage of unemployed people in Japan increased just fewer than 10% and reached 5.3% the same percentage as in the US in May 1998.

The unemployment rate in the US decreased unevenly from 7.0% to 5.3% between 1993 and 1998. During the following year the unemployment rate declined at the beginning and rose at the end of 1999.

Overall, we see the opposite trend for unemployment in the US and Japan until May, 1998. After that there were the upward trends for both countries.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 (IELTS): The levels of participation in education and science [4]

The bar charts illustrate the difference in education and science between developing and industrialized countries in 1080 and 1990. At the first glance we can see, that industrialized countries in 1980 and 1990.

At the first glance we can see that industrialized countries had significantly higher level of education and science in all mentioned years. To start with, the number of schooling years was approximately three times lower in developing countries than in developed both in 1980 and 1990 and was 2,4 and 3,6 years of studying respectively.

The number of scientists and technicians per 1000 people in industrialized countries was 41 in 1980 whereas forth less in developing countries. Evidentially, the number increased sharply in developed countries than in developing countries and reached 70 persons in 1990.

The developed countries spent much more money on R&D than others. The figure was 170 billion USD in 1980 and that was 120 billion higher than in developing countries. Industrialized countries spent nearly 350 billion USD on R&D in 1990 in contrast to developing countries that spent only 30, that was even the less than ten years earlier.