lucky_boy
Jun 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / Books and experience - rate my essay for TOEFL iBT [5]
Dear Dumi,
Thank you very much for your time and valuable comments.
Dear Dumi,
Thank you very much for your time and valuable comments.
lucky_boy
Jun 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / Books and experience - rate my essay for TOEFL iBT [5]
Dear all,
I would be so thankful if anyone could rate my essay.
Thanks for your sincerely helps in advance.
Are books more important than experience?
In our daily life, we acquire different knowledge from experience in different situations that are very important for us since we learn how to cope with our problems. Another way in which we can gain much knowledge is studying books. Some people strongly believe that books are more important than experience while others oppose it. I will try to examine below specific reasons for showing the paramount importance of books over the experience according to which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
First let us look at what a person can typically gain by studying books. It is knowledge which is a key to everything that we want to improve. Also, this is by default leading to develop skills in a time efficient way while obtaining knowledge by experience is more frustrating and time consuming. For example, I have studied different books in the engineering fields at university and learnt the results of different methods. Consequently, I know how to solve different problems and how to choose the best methods in different situations while gaining this knowledge would take me years and my valuable youth to obtain that knowledge by working and experiencing. In other words, the information which is written in books are already the knowledge that have been experienced by different people, and it is provided to give us a chance of saving time. As you can see, obtaining knowledge by studying books is more time efficient than that of by working.
The second reason is that getting knowledge from some experiences are such a hard that makes it impossible to be acquired. For example, if an individual want to investigate about the characteristics of living in forest or deserts, it will be so hard for him/her to go to that places for investigation. As it can be concluded that gaining knowledge by reading books is easier than knowledge by experience.
Far apart from the points that I made above, obtaining skills by experience will cost us a lot. For instance, if we wanted to invest our money by establishing a company, we would lose our invested money by the time we became sophisticated in that area. However, we could obtain that knowledge by a four-year study in a relevant field of study at university.
In summary, though some may refute it, gaining knowledge from books by going to university is much important than that by experience. Not only are the books time efficient but also they makes easy for us to investigate the hard experience. I strongly believe that people should get the relevant skills by studying books which at the same time is a promising step into a world of opportunities as long as it is accompanied by strong will and desire for distinction.
Word count:460
Dear all,
I would be so thankful if anyone could rate my essay.
Thanks for your sincerely helps in advance.
Are books more important than experience?
In our daily life, we acquire different knowledge from experience in different situations that are very important for us since we learn how to cope with our problems. Another way in which we can gain much knowledge is studying books. Some people strongly believe that books are more important than experience while others oppose it. I will try to examine below specific reasons for showing the paramount importance of books over the experience according to which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
First let us look at what a person can typically gain by studying books. It is knowledge which is a key to everything that we want to improve. Also, this is by default leading to develop skills in a time efficient way while obtaining knowledge by experience is more frustrating and time consuming. For example, I have studied different books in the engineering fields at university and learnt the results of different methods. Consequently, I know how to solve different problems and how to choose the best methods in different situations while gaining this knowledge would take me years and my valuable youth to obtain that knowledge by working and experiencing. In other words, the information which is written in books are already the knowledge that have been experienced by different people, and it is provided to give us a chance of saving time. As you can see, obtaining knowledge by studying books is more time efficient than that of by working.
The second reason is that getting knowledge from some experiences are such a hard that makes it impossible to be acquired. For example, if an individual want to investigate about the characteristics of living in forest or deserts, it will be so hard for him/her to go to that places for investigation. As it can be concluded that gaining knowledge by reading books is easier than knowledge by experience.
Far apart from the points that I made above, obtaining skills by experience will cost us a lot. For instance, if we wanted to invest our money by establishing a company, we would lose our invested money by the time we became sophisticated in that area. However, we could obtain that knowledge by a four-year study in a relevant field of study at university.
In summary, though some may refute it, gaining knowledge from books by going to university is much important than that by experience. Not only are the books time efficient but also they makes easy for us to investigate the hard experience. I strongly believe that people should get the relevant skills by studying books which at the same time is a promising step into a world of opportunities as long as it is accompanied by strong will and desire for distinction.
Word count:460
