Writing Feedback / Which is more important to you?A Business Or A House [6]

it is not a TOEFL or IELTS essay. of course i know that it is too short and it has no introduction or conclusion. I'm just giving a brief idea about what must written, and It is just an answer for the question

Writing Feedback / Which is more important to you?A Business Or A House [6]

business is more important because if one cares more about his business he will eventually get a good house , more harder work and more gorgeous business is more comfortable life as well.

the most adequate example for my opinion is Bill Gates, who because of his great business which is his invention of the microsoft he became the richest man in the world and thus he absolutely has good life and a good house. Gates drooped out from harvard the world best university and didn't care about the result ;however, when the microsoft dominates the pc-market microsoft company became the greatest company in the world and Bill Gates became the richest man as well.

another example is the Greatest composer Beethoven who cared about his business as a musician inspite of his complete deafness which led him to become the most famous composer and respected by many people