Writing Feedback / Entrepreuners and Jobs - GRE Issue essay (rate and comment) [3]

The sense of losing his country to false propaganda in his eyes was too much to bear and his later actions dwelled in mass murder as a result of it -- repetition

All in all, very inspiring and catchy essay! Well done :)
It'd be awesome if you could feedback on mine.

Undergraduate / The Choice an Athlete Makes to Become Professional Without a Degree [3]

Great use of vocabulary as well as research is well done :)
You have used evidence for whatever you are trying to say which gives the reader an idea that you know what you are saying and you're confident about it.

GOOD JOB!
Please feedback on my essay "CommoApp Essay -- University from an African's point of view"

Thanks!