Writing Feedback / Perfect Man.-Short Descriptive writing :) [2]

It was truly an alluring sight that I would always remember. His intense azure eyes met mine for the first time. Goosebumps came rushing in like raindrops unnecessarily with no purpose. I couldn't look away it was as if I was trapped by those lightening blue-sea eyes.

I could feel my body become surprisingly hot, too hot. My fingers were itching for something, something strange . Suddenly, the spell broke. He stumbled back with a startling look as if He was the the only one affected. Whilst I on the other hand froze. Yes froze like an idiot.

Yet my sultry eyes still had the time to unclothe him. Don't blame me I couldn't control my gaze. He was a very tall, muscular man with broad shoulders. Uncontrollably attractive man with no hardship when it comes to women. He had a structured, little bit crooked nose probably due to fights and a playful ,secret smile as if he knows something that we don't. Mysterious aura surrounded him. Certainly, he was my perfect dream man.

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So would you think? I'm 14 years old by the way...Is it good? Or rubbish? Thanks xxxx :)

P.S-Random writing just started this idea now :) xx