Undergraduate / I played piano for the school choir and my church;extracurricular activity [4]

Throughout my High School years, I played piano for the school choir and my church. I was the leader of the instrumentalists in the school choir and in the church choir as well. My passion and commitment as a pianist gave me unforgettable memories and experiences; playing piano in national musical concerts, high school gospel concerts, and international ministry programs.

But more importantly, I learned not only how to study and practice the instrumentation of songs and teach my co-instrumentalists, but also how to be submissive and teachable. Although I could perfectly get the chords of a song and teach exactly what was played in the song, accepting ideas from other instrumentalists made our instrumentation unique. Being a pianist, I also learned to be in harmony with others; i learned to be in sync with my co-instrumentalists and the choristers for a song to be ministered excellently. Working together as a team brought great success in our performances.

Through this extracurricular activity, I have imbibed the discipline of respecting people and their ideas and the essence of team work and unity.

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