Writing Feedback / IELTS ;Clothes are a necessary part of people's lives [5]

I know the pros are here. =)
And I'm writing to seek help from you guys to please have a look on the sample writing I did yesterday. I am working here in Malaysia and didn't have a chance to enroll at Niners for review. I paid for a writing review though, but the former examiner hasn't gotten back to me yet. So it would be great if i can get inputs from you guys.

I need your honest feedback. Please help me improve my writing. My exam will be on Saturday (September 7), so if you could please please comment on what I did, I would appreciate it very much.

Thanks guys!

Cheers,
Katie

WRITING TASK 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Clothes are a necessary part of people's lives.

What do you think clothes communicate about an individual?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Clothing is a basic human need. For most people, clothing gives us protection from the weather. It gives the feeling of warmth and brings comfort to the body. While for me, clothing defines my fashion sense and creativity.

I know people who are really not particular to the clothes they wear. Most of them don't even care about the color or if it is in style. What is important to them is something that could make them feel comfortable. For example it is winter, they will wear anything that could protect them from the cold. It doesn't matter if they will look good in it, or if they will look skinnier in it, but as long as it gives them warmth, that's what matters!

From my point of view, clothing is a very important aspect of my life as I use it as a way to express my personality. It is something I give a thought to weekly. Since my college days, I plan out the clothes I will wear every week. I never repeat my outfit for a month. It is a mortal sin for me to go outside with my shoes not complementing my dress. I'd rather not go and meet my friends if I'm not happy with what I wear. I make sure that the color of my dress, ensembles, nail polish, and hair go all together. It doesn't mean I have to spend a lot to buy new clothes every time, just to come up with my outfit for the day. Being creative; mixing and matching what I already have; and being able to come up with a new look after that is a big satisfaction for me.

Clothing might just be a necessity for some, however, in my opinion; it is a way to express one's creativity and fashion sense.