echan527
Nov 15, 2013
Undergraduate / I am perfectly content in the Movie Theater [6]
Arriving early, I got the one that's in the center, but not too far back or too close to the screen. I hear buzzes and watch small screens flicker off around me as people shut down all connections to the outside world. The first studio logo fills the screen, and as I sit in silence with a group of strangers, we begin our escape from the real world. We let ourselves feel vulnerable; we experience a story.
I think you are able to omit the But, as you are just describing your preferred seat.
Other than that, your essay sounds great! I really love how you included emotion shared between strangers. It's not something you see everyday, but it truly is effective, and I think that it makes you appear to be a sociable person who can relate with many people. Really enjoyed reading your essay!
Arriving early, I got the one that's in the center, but not too far back or too close to the screen. I hear buzzes and watch small screens flicker off around me as people shut down all connections to the outside world. The first studio logo fills the screen, and as I sit in silence with a group of strangers, we begin our escape from the real world. We let ourselves feel vulnerable; we experience a story.
I think you are able to omit the But, as you are just describing your preferred seat.
Other than that, your essay sounds great! I really love how you included emotion shared between strangers. It's not something you see everyday, but it truly is effective, and I think that it makes you appear to be a sociable person who can relate with many people. Really enjoyed reading your essay!